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NAGISA BAD BOY *send me some too* jk Good story. I love the ending hopefully you did a mini sequel for this.

Nagisa XD

Lol

im gonna cry. can i cry over this sweet fanfic?

OMG! LMFAO! Nagisa!

Oh my god the Nagisa part was perf

It was absolutely wonderful. There were a few mistakes here and there with wording, but it wasn't anything too big. A few comma errors (mostly not putting them in), but again it didn't distract from the story. There was one sentence that I figured you accidentally messed up on. It was, "Not waiting any longer Haruka pressed his lips gently to Haruka's for their very first kiss." It was a little mistake. Again, the story was absolutely wonderful. I loved it.

Literally laughed out loud at the ending!

I loved the whole story! XD

very well written! i love the adjectives you used and the detail of the fic. 5/5 xxx

I want those photos.

THIS WAS ADORBABLE.

The way I read this, there's a particular intensity to the lemon scene... Makoto getting embarrassed by his size is something I find adorable for some reason! I wish they could've played more while Haru was in the corset get-up , though :)
Grown-up!Makoto sounds really burly and I can't fault Haru for getting so sexually frustrated about it... Nine years is too long a wait, boy! (And speaking of the nine years, I think you miscalculated the time of when they graduated from high school since Mako is just turning 24 here... it would've been just six years since and the three years left over would've constituted their high school years, where Haruka did admit as the time when he started feeling more towards Makoto)
Story flow is good, though a bit stilted. Characterization can afford some tweaking (but that's probably just my own headcanons interfering).
Keep writing!

How can Makoto and Haruka get married? They're already married. *shot*

Nicely written for the couple, especially with it being both their firsts. It's nice that they gave that to each other on Mako's birthday.

Looking forward to other fics from you.

-Gwyn