will you be continuing this?

its brilliant

I would love to see what happens next.

Continue?

A quick tip, don't use central justification/alignment, this makes it harder than it needs be to read. Left is the better choice. It's a good start, though your writing runs together. Clearly separate who is speaking, you've got a start on breaking up the text, it could be done more, no one likes to read through a massive block of text. All in all a good first chapter

I liked it! What happens next?

Liked your beginning. Looking forward to seeing where you go from here.

Interesting beginning. Would very much to see where it goes