Next chapter please?

I was hoping that under the unfortunate conditions of the coronavirus you might have come back to this. You have not, which leads me to think you probably never will.
Though, I hope that you do. I have really enjoyed it thus far.

Was that Madara?

This is good. I'm hoping you continue it.

this was slightly better. however tjis story has one major problem. you put all this effort into how deranged and murderous hidan is supposed to be. but you don't write it. you have characters REFER to hidan killing random people. you REFERENCE unnamed side characters being killed. but you have never actually included in your writing an example of hidan actually indescriminatly butchering people absent necessity. it detracts from the character that you seem afraid to actually write him doing these supposedly terrible things. like you want to pretend he is these things without actually doing any of them. it detracts from the story that you don't demonstrate live acts of horror because it doesn't feel authentic that he is actually frightening when the reader doesn't get to experience any of his deeds.

your combat scenes are garbage. utterly lacking in logic qnd clearly shaped by a want for 'cool' plot rather than competant experienced killers out for blood. the prime example being naruto having her dead to rights from behind, a wide open shot with any blow, and he kicks her in the head. he's strong enough to tear up trees without trying, but he barely gives her pause with a hard kick to the head. and worse, he has his scythe in his hand and all the time in the world to make that little swing to bury it in her. but instead of going for the kill like you say he is trying to do, he just doesn't go for the win. the combat is slow. infantiley clumsey. utterly lacking in threat. and so. much. jibber jabber. people actively trying to kill each other don't pause for monologuing. they don't threaten to kill each other then not try to kill each other.
this was actually painfull to read. the originality of the concept is the only reason i could get through the clumsy explanations of the prologue and setup. now the combat being so badly rendered is a hair from killing this for me.
I recommend that for your own improvement you whould read 'Hurricane Suite' and 'Patriot's Dawn' by Dr. Snakes MD to get an idea of what skilled child soldiers turned hardened killers should look like. they are the best rendering of chakra enhanced combat I've read, qnd i think you would benefit from comparing your portrayal of combat to those 2 stories.

does not include batteries, BRB dying! xD

This story is so good I’ve reread it too many times to count! Waiting for those sweet, sweet updates.

When is this next chapter going to happen?! This is a painful wait, you know. How the h*ll does this end and who is about to be summoned back from the dead? Rereading has only made this itch I've had for the next chapter worse lol

I hope to see this updated soon but in the meantime I'm going to go ahead reread it. Again. I've been checking my alerts for this story specifically since the last chapter, so I figured why not. Hopefully it will, a lot of my favorite stories have been updated recently what with everyone self isolating themselves.

Stay safe while all this crap is going on.

ohmygodnarutowhatnow

UPDATE

Oh, well that Jutsu is a dead give-away to who the 'not-hashi' is.

I mean, I was pretty sure of who it was, but the Impure World Reincarnation Jutsu being used was just the cherry on top. Looking forwards to the next chapter!

I can take remember if I’ve commented yet or not- but I read this about a year or two ago now and just tonight it popped back up in my head and I though I wanna. Reread it! I read the last chapter for now and am super excited to read it all over again tomorrow morning! I’m also super fucking hyped for whenever it updates next- even if that’s years down the line I’ll still be here! Hope you’re doing well and thanks for making this amazing fic!

NOOO I WANT TO READ MOREEEEEEEE! This is getting awesome! I am assuming that it was either the mysterious man or tobirama due to the ending. This story si awesome and has so much potential