As it turns out, this story has been dropped for quite some time now, and it is unknown if the original author will intend to pick it back up again.
It's been a good run so far, but it's time to confirm the state of death/permafrost that this story is in.
I don't know if NorthSouthGorem would want to get back on this, being his editor here and all, but I would have to say that as messy as this story was, it was a good exercise on what to do, and what not to do for any H-scenes.
Hopefully you will have had as good a time with this story, and hope you can forgive the death/freezing of it.
With any luck, someone will pick it back up again and do it differently. Who knows.
Best wishes,
Kurogane7