Secrets and lies
By yaoisasunaruyaoi
BETA'D YAY!!!!
Sasuke-20
Naruto-20
"Talking"
/Thoughts/
This is my second fanfic so be nice and review.
I do not own the anime Naruto, nor any of the characters from it. I do not make any money from the writing of this story.
Chapter 1 Dark side of Konohagakure
In a dark and gloom alley, with puddles of water on the brick road running through it, there were garbage cans to one side and on the opposite side, a worn out building called, 'Night Ninja,' stood. It was the only gay bar around, with display pictures of men in tight thongs on each side of the entrance.
Many people didn't know such a place existed; most of all, people didn't know the last member of the most famous clan, the Uchiha, was its most recent visitor.
He was bent over a wooden chair as Sasuke thrust his large cock in and out of his ass, at first in slow thrusts then rapidly growing into more powerful thrusts. As soon as Sasuke came, he immediately pulled out.
He didn't even care if the person he was fucking just minutes ago hadn't cum yet. He reached down between his bent legs to pull up his blue jeans. He moved to the neatly made bed, grabbing his black button up shirt and his leather jacket, both of which he had thrown off when he entered the room.
He ignored the blue haired teen as he cursed Sasuke, as he gripped his still hard erection, jerking himself until he also came.
The main problem within these three paragraphs was the tense confusion. Again, reading this aloud as you reread your work helps to hammer out the inconsistencies. It will also help to make sure that things read well.
The only time Sasuke really pleasured his partner was if they were blond. Sasuke always took his time, letting the blond cum before him.
After throwing his jacket on, he made his way to the closed door. He opened it, letting himself out, and made his way down the stairs. Upon reaching the first floor, he didn't spare a glance to anything except the front two doors. Besides, he had somewhere else to be at.
After Sasuke left, Yuki appeared at the bottom of the stairs, trying to button up his white shirt.
The barkeeper was the first to notice him, as he stood behind the bar, wiping a shot glass clean.
"Told you he was good," he said smugly to the blue haired teen.
Standing there, he took a minute before he replied, "Yea, he was. But he…" He couldn't find the rights word to what had happened upstairs.
The barkeeper rolled his eyes; he replied easily, "Let me guess…. he pulled out before you could come, right?" The teen nodded slowly as if he had done something wrong.
"Don't worry about it he does it all the time!" one of the bar members said.
"Why?" the teen asked.
"Come here and sit next to me." He slid the chair out from under the table, with his palm facing up as he gestured for him to sit. The blue haired teen did as he was told.
"Well… you see… Sasuke's… umm, in love." He struggled to say the words, because he knew if Sasuke found out, he'd surely be dead by tomorrow. But the newcomer needed to know, so with a long pause he continued. "His name is Naruto, blonde haired kid, basically, the kid knows Sasuke's gay, but doesn't know that Sasuke's into him." The teen nodded for him to continue. "Basically, Sasuke's never been the uke. He's saving it for Naruto... so never ask for you to be on top. THAT'S a big no-no with him. You should see the last guy who asked to be the seme!"
He laughed a little, than shivered when the image popped into his head.
"SASUKE-TEME!"
Twitching as his name was yelled so loud that people stopped to stare, he turned around, knowing who it was…
Naruto.
TBC
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