That’s a really cute first chapter. I like the interaction between Frank and Nancy!

Wowee, that battle was something else. But Frank and Nancy kissed, and all's well with the world. And yes, feed Chet, he's not Chet if he isn't hungry at some point, lol.

Uh Joe, I think throwing him down the stairs did more damage than a boot to the head did. But Joe's retelling is hysterically funny. XD

(Snicker) I always appreciate some satire with my morning tea. Fun and funny!

“The Mystery of why we didn’t do this a long time ago.” Cute reunion, unexpected plot twist, some silly scenes which made me smile (glow in the dark lipstick?! Haha). This story was very different from your other ones, but, as usual, your humor comes out and you’re not afraid to take risks. Thanks for sharing!

Hahaha! Wow! This chapter was completely “out there.” I guess I should have seen that based on your note at the top. So much of this was ridiculous, but I laughed out loud so many times. Nancy with Celine Dion and the pint of ice cream, Joe’s crazy story with Chet burping, and the line about Joe being jealous of Frank uttering a woman’s name instead of his after a head wound- hilarious. Still, some parts showed a real sweetness, like when Joe was so proud of his dad in the NYPD despite Fenton being successful. Great way to experiment with style!

This chapter stood out to me mainly in the way it was organized. Nancy is so ebullient and talkative, and Frank’s responses are short and to the point. You manage to convey that he knows her so well. His amusement, concern, knowledge of her actions, and the way in which he envisions her as she describes her case were spot on and sweet. Moreso, without saying they’re connected, you manage to show it. I do feel bad for Ned here. At the same time, Nancy can’t have it both ways. She always ends up with Frank and it’s not fair to either man not to be honest. I didn’t expect the “I love you” at the end of the chapter. :)

I'm sorry. I just can't. The characters don't feel real and you're going a thousand directions at once. I can't focus on this.

This is really choppy. It's confusing. I'm not quite sure how to follow it. I really like the idea, but it's just weird.

LOL... very amusing, and very well written.

Thanks for a good read and a good laugh! ;)

-Shani :)

Whoa... that was unexpected. Looking forward to seeing how they all manage to get out of this mess and Frank is back to his usual self.

Great writing as always!

-Shani :)

Very nice initial chapter. I look forward to seeing how this story progresses.

-Shani :)

I liked-very light and funny-still like your edgy stuff too-keep it up. max2013

This is hilarious and adorable.

Well, you've certainly got me hypnotized to want me to read more. More please!