I just finished chapter 2, or prologue 2 for clarification, and I failed to notice and paragraphs with multiple speakers. As such, I retract a statement in my previous comment.
Details are still scarce throughout the story, and I've begun to notice you using the same words or phrases multiple times within a small window of text, sometimes in back to back sentences. Still a good story, will continue to read and watch for improvement.

I like the idea behind this so far, but there are a few issues. The two biggest so far, for chapter 1, are: 1) You can not have two people speaking in the same paragraph. So if you think of it like a live conversation, even between two people, when the speaker changes so to does the paragraph. 2) If you can increase the details in your story it will become so much better of a read. Honestly, you can't go wrong with describing everything. As a writer, you are painting a picture of your story using words instead of colors. They say that a picture is worth a thousand words, but that also means a thousand words paints a picture. If it helps, try actually drawing it out and then describing it in your story. Outside of that, it has potential and I will continue to read.

Digging the Hellsing crossocer, even if it is just the casuall

Pyrrha

Lol what? Ozpin is a pussy, letting a child be emotionless killers because of entrepreneurs?
That's coming from the greatest hunter fucking stupid as hell

The part 2 prologue was rushed I mean Ozpin tells Jaune to suck it up after literally a minute after he hears that his parents died I mean dude give him at least a week to grieve! Don't get me wrong good fanfic

Dude you are doing a fucking fantastic job on this I wish this was canon!

just favorited & followed ur story; NOW PLEASE UPDATE SOON!

about yang's dream; not much swimming happening then

truly a masterpiece, your a aster of the craft good sir/ma'am.

in the room with gilbert; the first person is sun (XII), the second if Fu (III) (green-haired girl from Naruto)
not sure who the third is but my guess is its Kakashi (II) (naruto) (Sasuke may be there as #VII)
I have my suspicions on the remaining #'s

Naruto: rasengan: ball of flaming-white aura (right?)

This is full of dmc, prototype, red vs blue, and final fantasy references now even dc comics

ehhh he doesn't need crocea mors he should dressed like a XIII member anddd he should be acting different so I kinda lost interest

man...your story is amazing am going to read this again and again because jaune is in the spotlight finale a writer who is making jaune a powerful hunter and my favorite moment their where jaune use his wings truly an amazing story