I like a confident Harry but this is to OOC. Theirs a contract between him and daphne yet you have him get in a pointless realtionship with Angelina. Harry isn’t the type of person to hook up with someone for the sake of experimenting. The romance is a joke and a lot of it makes it hard to read the story. Might as well have made Harry a playboy since the marriage contract is basically pointless since daphne gets no screen time.

You are an excellent writer for age 14.

Either you're nuts, or Harry is. Dumbledore never did what was "right" in his life. He does what is easy, or what is for the "Greater Good"; HIS Greater Good, that is. How is leaving a baby on a doorstep in the middle of the night "right"? Even if sending him to the Dursleys was the right thing to do, the way that it was done was completely wrong. And leaving him there with nobody to check on him, ever? That's negligent. Particularly since he didn't have the authority to do so. No, Dumbledore is as much a Dark Lord as Voldemort.

please, please, please, tell me his answer

Now i think about it ur obsession with Fleur is over the limit author. Better put Harry and Fleur instead of pointless drama about Daphne life.

What the actual bullshit is this? Really author? Daphne spend time with him, LOVE him and Harry did what? Cheat on her like nothing happen? One second he is all over Fleur? Holy shit this is crappyshit. TOO ALL THAT WANT TO READ THIS STORY READ THE LAST CHAPTER BEFORE GOIND FOR EVEN 1 CHAPTER

Ah ffs why did u do this? Seriously? The whole story was a weird rollercoster ride and the end was just messed up! Well, the only thing that can console me is that i like daphne and fleur but in the story, Daphne deserves his love.. You shouldve made it 'active' as the last line.. atleast then i couldve slept well tonight!

sorry but i like daphne as blond or ravenette

Well that was stupid of Harry. And quite rude.

That boggart scene felt very contrived.

why you doing this man. why, u cannot end with a cliffe

For future me- Don’t read. Check last chapter, don’t read.

i was gonna give a good review cause i really enjoyed reading this but whyyyyyy would u end it like that omg im actually pissed but overall other then the ending great story but honestly there was no reason to end it like that couldve at least showed us

As of chapter 2 it is a mix of good writing and awkward plotting.

I get that Harry would want to leave the Dursley’s and get another guardian/live at the Leaky Cauldron. But so openly means Dumbledore would have found him within a day. Ditto when his disappearance is in the papers. Do the Cauldron and bookstore patrons not read the a paper?

Proof of Sirius’ innocence was in the Potter’s Will. Which Dumbledore witnessed. So why didn’t Sirius get a trial? Dumbledore had absolute proof of his innocence.

As to the Wills, they are strange. They each insult Pettigrew. While at the same time acknowledging he was their Secret Keeper. It’s schizophrenic.

Greengrass and Harry referring to each other as the Ice Queen or Golden Boy is weird. Outsiders may refer to them as that, but for them to use the term is strange.

I don't usually give reviews, but holy shot this made me CRY. You mad son of a bitch, I love and hate you lmao