I really like the concept of this piece! It may be the first "Mulan" story to go on my Favorites list.

I'm not sure the repetition of "My name is Mulan" is necessary. I'm also not sure about the way Shang divides Ping/Mulan's actions between her two identities. That kind of undermines her character development, how amazing it was that she progressed from such ineptitude to such excellence.

A couple notes on grammar: There are a few instances when you seem to slip between past and present tense. Is "a thousand thousand" intentional or a typo? "been beat" should be "been beaten". "save himself" should be "saved him".

I love the last line, about Shang questioning the worth of his trust. That was really interesting and says a lot about his character.

I like this a lot!

Nice!

I like this. It was nicely written and felt very fitting.

Great story! I enjoyed it!

This was very good! Such good pacing and fresh descriptions of his memories of the experiences he had with Mulan. If we could hear Shang's thoughts, they would sound like this. A poignant introspection of the ride into the city! Thank you for writing this.

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Nice.

I like this. I never thought about the in between, honestly. Although I have to admit, I found the constant use of "my name is Mulan!" bit a little distracting. But over all, I like it, and I love the 'what is his trust worth' line.

This is amazing! I love it to peices!

This is really good. I couldn't write something like this without screwing up Shang's head and then he'd think girly thoughts. A great piece of work!

This really is a lovely partial-character study.

I love Mulan, and as I have gotten older I have come to appreciate whatever internal struggles Shang would have experienced en route to the emperor's palace. I imagine that he would have fought with his pride, that perhaps he was unsettled with the idea that a woman, a woman who deceived him, saved his life. That is a blow to the ego on many levels and I greatly enjoy the position you commandeered in exploring Shang's stunted response.

Like you said, Shang greeting her with "Mulan" always did sound a bit peculiar, and your explanation is both feasible and well-written. I really enjoyed reading it. Please keep up the great work!

well maybe it seems a bit too automatic for you but it might also be a way for him to remind her of her place: she is a woman now, no longer a soldier, so she is no longer Ping. but still i really liked your one shot! great trip into Shang's mind.

This was great! I love character studies like these, and you made a great observation from the movie. It's a small detail, but you did a good job expanding on that.

i really liked this, and totally agree, he calls her Mulan way to quickly. the only slight critique I had was when you used 'her name is Mulan!' as your break, for me, personally, it just through me off, if you meant it to do it purposefully, then that's fine, just as a reader it sort of is distracting. other then that I really loved this story and your idea for it :) great job!