This Story was really good. I loved the feel for it. It felt kinda like I was watching a play back of someone’s memory’s. Really cool.

Beautifully written.

Superb

Beautiful

This is confusing. I thought that Percy and the other boy were different people, but there's apparently a big reveal that they aren't. I don't see how that lines up with him dying? How does that fit in. Or are they still separate people, sort of?

my god, your story blew me away. words can't describe how well you have written. the words, the feelings, the whole story, it is directly going in to my heart. I can't even describe how I feel right now. maybe its a feeling of bittersweetness, yeah, that is the best I can describe it. it feels like both percy and artemis are real instead of being fiction.

the way you've written the story, the way is their love is just not meant to be, it reminds me of a friend's lovelife. but of course the one he loves isn't an emortal or something, but well, lets just say that change some surcomstances here and there, and you get the story of my friend's lovelife.

I would really like it if you made this in to a longer story. you know, just change a few things, make them meet again, make artemus except her feelings and let those two travel in to a forbidden love!

ok. Great. I got lost at the end. did he suicide?

Beautiful writing. I'll hope to see more from you.

This...is amazing!

Original, well written and beautiful. Thank u for writing such a wonderful tear jerker.

oh my gosshhhhhh! "sobbing"
that was sooooo goooooddddddd!

I really love this story, even if the ending got me all sad (it's really difficult to make my cry). It's not often that I get to read a story that doesn't have a happy ending, and that just makes me love them even more.

This one-shot was freakin amazing. Ngl I cried at the end.

OMG! This one of the most amazingly beautiful Percy and Artemis stories I have ever read. i couldn't help but cry at the end while sad it is still a beautiful interpretation of their love.

I've read This story SO MANY TIMES... And it continues to blow my mind in how amazing it was, the whole plot, the story and the character development was astounding. Out of all the stories I've read in 3 years this honestly is the best story I have ever read. I wish you would create more of these and kept this amazing stuff going. Godspeed Sir/Ma'm and I wish you all the best.

Sad

Umm.. How to say this, I think that you are very analytical in your stories. I see what you are doing here in terms of staying the character, of Artemis not being in love and not understanding enough about love to fall in love. Though I honestly felt Artemis's character didn't have a lot of depth. Do you know what I mean? In my opinion I just see a really cautious side of her and not much more. I wasn't able to connect to Artemis because I felt she was really closed in the story. So my main point is that I wasn't really able to connect with the story. I'm sorry if this is harsh but that is my honest opinion. It might have a bit to do with your writing style as The Chaotic Hunter is quite similar to this.

On the other hand good characterisation, suspense and grammar. But I think its this is too logical instead of emotional. That could just be me at the end of the day. haha

Though reading it again I think its the kind of like- second person view you write it in. I don't know why but I just don't like second-person stories. Haha ok now its just me