Really luffy gets surprised again because Richie was too fast for him and sent him flying through a building down the street,and he says well that was unexpected and vixen thinks luffy needs cover fire when he’s trapped ,none of this story is enjoyable , he has the storm fruit yet luffy is so damn weak it’s embarrassing ,his attacks are weak everyone else is doing fine , what were you thinking when you wrote this bullshit and does all this sound good to you?, waste of time

Luffy’s arctic sledgehammer , sounds good but only sent Morgan a couple of feet ,lightning long shot to Helmeppo sending him back several feet , is luffy really that weak,because these attacks are fucking pathetic , they are not doing any damage at all, so many attacks on Morgan and he did not finish him Makino had to save his ass , LAME!

Luffy’s arctic sledgehammer , sounds good but only sent Morgan a couple of feet ,lightning long shot to Helmeppo sending him back several feet , is luffy really that weak,because these attacks are fucking pathetic , they are not doing any damage at all

Luffy’s arctic sledgehammer , sounds good but only sent Morgan a couple of feet ,sigh !

These attacks are very underwhelming, all that effort for the lightning long shot , just to knock Helmeppo back a few feet , not impressed at all.

Love Makino’s story here , it just works ,never read a fic that gave her a backstory, hope this is good , anyway onwards!

Wait...so in this story Makino is Luffy’s actual aunt? That’s disappointing :/
I thought she was going to be one of luffy’s women, and got so excited when he called her monkey D makino, thought something had already happened off screen.

Thanks

What happens next and when is the next chapter?

What..adisgustinly..over..powered..Devil..Fruit...Spacebar..broke...;(

Great story can't wait for the next chapter

I personally love how you did this just ignore the Canon Nazis if they don't like it they can suck it and not read. I can't wait to see the rewrite/continuation don't be afraid to be graphically descriptive if you want M rating is there for a reason hell my mom's romance novels are basically porn with plot a lot of plot but still M stands for mature so if they aren't 18 they shouldn't be reading write your way and make your world come alive on the pages. Ja Ne

Great story cant wait for rewrite.

The fuck is with the Japanese? It's weeby as shit

So I take it Makino won't be in Luffy's harem. Shame, incest is wincest beaten only by twincest. LOL

Also, why would Makino hide her blood tie to Luffy in this world?

P.S. seeing (reading?) The beginning of One Piece over and over, I'm starting to hate Shanks. I want a fic where Luffy doesn't forgive Shanks for letting the bandits make him look like a little bitch.