Love this story and how the Black family are portrayed. Hope you update soon!

Since the chapters are so short I'm just going to read this all. Hope you don't mind.

[Chapter 1]

I like your opening. You convey vividly yet in a small way just what is going on. You convey Cygnus depravity, Walburga's madness, and Orion's love of his wife. I can picture [It shatters, sending amber liquid and shards of fragile shrapnel raining down on the carpet.] this very well due to your use of words. And this line: [He does not tell her that she will be alright, because after what happened to her, how can she ever be alright again?] Sends shivers down my spine.

[Chapter 2]

[They sleep in separate bedrooms, but he often wakes to the sound of her weeping.] Is a great opening sentence. You instantly have the reader's sympathy and interest. Then with how you continue, you keep the reader feeling bad and sympathizing with the characters. [She has no way of telling which choice would be better for her sanity (which, she can tell, is slowly slipping away)] Lines like this give a nice call back to canon as well. Your ending sentence: ["But if I start screaming, then I shall never stop."] was chilling and made me want to continue.

[Chapter 3]

This chapter is good too. It gives us more insight into Cygnus and just how much of a right git he is. [Not gonna lie, Sis, you'd make a shitty wife.] This line made me hate him with all my heart and soul.

[Chapter 4]

This chapter made me really like Walburga. I pity her, honestly, but I like her and feel for her because of her traumas. It made me no like Orion very much; in the first few chapters he acts so sympathetic and caring for her but in this one his attitude is way off.

[More than anything, she wants her marriage to work - she wants to be able to be a proper wife to her sweet and caring savior, not a scarred and broken creature who pushes her husband away because her traitorous mind continues to allow her brother's cruel words to sting her.] This line is a perfect description of Walburga so far, yet such a sad and haunting line and one of the reasons I pity her in this story.

And piss off Kreacher is all have to say to him.

[Chapter 5]

I want to pause in my reactions to how your characters act and point out that I really like your description. [her jeweled heels clicking sharply against the hardwood floor.] This piece is a very good example of what I like; your word choice is perfect for envisioning what is going on without being overbearing. There is a very clear picture in my mind of what is happening in this story.

Urgh, Blacks. Lucretia sounds like such a git when she complains about interacting with house elves. However, it definitely catches what the Black family is known for: being right arses.

You develop Lucretia's character well in such a short timespan - selfish, rude, etc. You also make me wonder how she plays into the plot.

[Chapter 6]

I admit I don't have much to say about this chapter. I like how your wrote Orion's inner monologue in the first part, but the touching just felt to soon for what you've developed and the second part left me scratching my head.

[Chapter 7]

Again, not much to say for this chapter but I feel so bad for poor Ignatius, getting involved with the Blacks and having the luck of being engaged to Lucretia. That woman is a despicable person from what I've so far, but she is at least enjoyable to read. I really like that you've given these characters some personality but I almost feel as if I know Lucretia better than I do Walburga and Orion at the moment.

Anyway, I really enjoyed this story despite the fact it's not usually my preference in reading material and I look forward to more.

My, what a fascinating way to start!

This was super short, but you really made it work and put a lot in there. I like the idea of Orion being her rescuer, I've written it the other way around, actually, but the idea is sweet in a way. It also explains why they'd marry, doesn't it?

You'd think there'd be a big reason why two people who are so closely related would do such a thing. I've always felt it has to be more than just blood purity because there are more than enough "pure" families around that both of them could have found matches in.

Anyway, this was an entrapping start and I will be reading on further!

Sheesh. I got to wonder what's so wrong about Ignatius that Lucretia would basically throw a temper tantrum. Also why she calls him "Iggy" I'm not sure if it's suppose to be like Icky, or if there's another reason for the nickname.

Iggy on the other hand doesn't seem particular bad, just unlucky. Perhaps the parents should have thought longer about their children's marriage since they insist on making the choice for them. For whatever reason that they chose the match.

Okay, firstly you must be aware how COMPLETELY DELIGHTED I was to see that you had updated this fic! I am once again, hooked.

I loved that Walburga had a bit more development in this chapter, and there was some insight into her personality (albeit it being from Lucrietta's thoughts). It's nice that you're not focusing entirely on making Walburga seem quite constantly low and depressed because of her trauma; and there is actually still a person in there. It makes her seem very strong and (so far) in control.

Completely loved it, like the rest of the story (I have read it from the start for what I believe to be the third time so far). I'm intrigued to know what happened regarding "Iggy" next...

The only thing I noticed is that at one point you spelled fiancé at one point as 'fiancee', and then the next as 'fiance'. But that's the only, eeny weeny detail. Well done!

I've been meaning to read and review this since you updated it.

Excellent chapter.

Ella the ninja plum.

This was an interesting chapter! I like how it seems this is turning into more of an ensemble cast (that is, not focusing just on Orion and Walburga). I feel kinda bad for Ignatius (and I'm kinda surprised Orion would be so openly rude to him at the end), although he also seems very passive and wishy-washy, so I can understand why Lucretia wouldn't like him. I don't recall him even being mentioned in the previous chapter, so I liked how him being forgotten by Lucretia paralleled him being forgotten by the readers, in a sense.

Anyway, I'm looking forward to reading more.

OMFG, poor Ignatius. XD His first POV bit gave off such a completely defeated and puppy-like vibe, I wanted to squish him. Loved Lucretia's childish antics and her surprised displeasure at Walburga not playing along, then her suddenly panicking over having left her fiancé outside, followed by the crying breakdown. Aw. And Orion went full-blown protective badass brother on poor Ignatius who hadn't done a thing to deserve it. Those poor babies! ;) They're very cute though!

[She calls out for Orion and he is there in an instant, wrapping her in his arms, telling her that she is safe, that he is here to protect her] WAS SO FREAKING PERFECT UGH MY FEELS JUST EXPLODED ALL OVER MY LAPTOP. The hurt/comfort feels are very real, and thank you so much for that :D

I didn't spot any SPaG errors, and the descriptions added a lot to the story. Chilling start to this story!

Oh no! Poor Ignatius! He just want to love and be loved. It seems like Ignatius could actually be a fun guy but for some reason, Lucretia sees him as an uptight man. Maybe it's just because she doesn't want to be married. I like how commanding Orion is for just a 17 year old. Looking forward to the next chapter.

Aaah. I got the notification because I followed you, so I never started this story until now. And i already love it, especially that last line of Orion comforting Walburga.

Haha, the part with the stuffed animal unicorn was cute. It also reminds me just how young the characters are, because I keep forgetting that (Orion at least) is apparently still a teenager. I also liked the explanation you slipped in of Lucretia and Walburga's relationship and why Lucretia is there; it'll be interesting to see what happens in the next chapter, although it would be nice if this chapter was longer.

I've just read this whole story again. (I am in love) Seriously hope you update soon Lamia, it's like my favourite multi-chap I've ever read! Feeling inspired to write about Walburga as a result...

Ah, I really enjoyed the Orion/Walburga bits there—their waking up so close, the small caress that had such impact on the two of them, Walburga reacting instinctively and Orion being so overwhelmed but fighting his own reactions because he didn't want to frighten or hurt her. His commitment and determination to respect and take care of her were lovely. And it's believable that he would be a bit short as a consequence because of his edginess and irritation at himself—thankfully Walburga didn't take it the wrong way, though. I liked the way you portrayed the dynamic between Walburga and Lucretia, and their personalities. The ending was quite nice—and the unicorn made me chortle ;)

Well, I wasn't planning on reading all 6 chapters, but well done, you successfully sucked me in! I was initially avoiding reading this because of the rape/incest warning, but I am so glad I did! I am really enjoying this so far *adding to story alert* and I can't wait for you to update!

I've never really read anything about the previous Black generation, and only a handful of fics about Walburga. Most stories usually hold the same kind of stereotype that people associate with Bellatrix - that Walburga is evil and pureblood and yadda yadda - but I like stories like this that remind the reader that Walburga (much like Bellatrix) was once human, and wasn't always portrayed as being "evil".

I'm enjoying the association between Walburga and Orion too, and I hope that they will have some more interaction soon. I love how caring you have portrayed Orion; once again you have avoided making all the Black family members cynical and unkind. I am also loving Lucretia - the only thing I was going to call you out on was in chapter 5 when she was feeling "guilty" about making a mark on the floor, but you quickly cleared up any confusion that might have arose around that, so I'm happy.

As usual - your grammar and sentence structure is immaculate and I can't see a single mistake or error.

Well done - your talent for writing a completely compelling fic has overwhelmed me once again - I usually avoid multi chaps at all costs (I don't like commitment haha) but I'm definitely going to keep my eye out for updates on this. xxx