Reviews for Alchema: Child of Fate
Sir That Guy chapter 11 . 9/22/2017
Me before reading the next chapter info: Ooh, this is going to be goood.
Me after reading said info: ...this can't possibly end well.
Guest chapter 8 . 9/22/2017
I can't wait for more Lady. She's awesome.
Calmzone1 chapter 16 . 5/25/2017
What an interesting story line. I know you're combining this one and Child of Strength into one, but other than the beginning, I can't see why? Then again you've used parts or definitely characters from this one in 'Very Bad Boys' I like all of them. They all have slight differences and ideas, but a common thread.
Calmzone1 chapter 9 . 5/25/2017
Awwww...so sad, the games they were all forced to play.
HaNova chapter 1 . 1/1/2017
you destroy me. WHY SO MANY WALL BREAKS NOW I WANT TO READ THE REST OF EACH ONE! T_T
hotcat chapter 16 . 12/16/2016
so interesting. Liked it
Mirage chapter 16 . 9/7/2016
ist an interesting Story, would be nice to see where this goes,
will he be with draco and is draco a veela?
how is voldemort...and why did dumbledor bind Lady to himself when he is with Grindelwald...who i think should be set free to teach dumbledore a lesson
will there be a treesome with lucius Lady and narcissa one day...
how will it all Change the future...

i hope you come back one day to finish this Story one day
Flickering Ember chapter 3 . 1/24/2015
It's alright if I tear up, right? Entirely understandable?
God, we haven't even hit the worst of it.
The Sound Shaman chapter 6 . 1/16/2015
Hey pal, maybe get your syntax into something resembling order, and then stop randomly popping into the first person. Harry isn't me, he's he or him. You have an intriguing concept, but your writing is incredibly stilted and bounces between decent and absolutely shit-tastic.
Stormshadow13 chapter 16 . 12/10/2014
Awsome fic!

Hoping to See more of Lucius and Lady and maybe the Lestrange twins in the next fic!

Also looking forwards to seeing Prince and his friends and Harry and his friends, That is going to be really interesting!
crackdmoon chapter 1 . 12/7/2014
The July 31st dream is from your other story Can You Hear Me Now? right?
AyumiUK chapter 6 . 12/3/2014
I usually don't like OCs in the HP fandom, but this story is interesting. So! Here's some con-crit3
You mixed first and third person a lot in this chapter. In the same phrase.
Also, "of d'Arc" is redundant; d' and of have the same meaning. Like saying "the las noches" or something like that.
I think your word processor is buggy. Summery is the wheather outside; summary is a brief description of the story.
For some reason, I pictured Lady (as in, Mary) from DmC with Dante's coat. Was your character a shout out?
passanger chapter 6 . 12/3/2014
This chapter would have been better with half the descriptions there were and with more explanation. Also, the point of view sometimes changes from third to first person - it's quite jarring.
AllenHeart chapter 1 . 11/26/2014
{Dream July 18th}oh my god I died laughing
R.I.P.
Allen_Heart
Guest chapter 16 . 11/26/2014
I got has far as chapter 11 before I had enough of this story !

It makes no senses what so ever !

The Crimson Mage.
P.S: Did you eat bad mushroom when you did this ?
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