Okay, get your ass back here and finish this story you fuck.

There are some things that I encountered throughout this story that were really bothering me and that you should improve upon:

1) The dialogue is way too fast-paced for the reader to keep up with. Meaning that you need to explain what a character is doing, feeling, and looking like before or after they speak, depending on the situation.

2) The story is rushed. I don’t mind if you simply carry on from this latest chapter for the story, but the least you can do, is to slow down. Take time to describe the settings going on in the scenes and the thoughts an feelings of the main characters. You can’t go wrong with details. Just don’t over do it.

3) Repeating phrases and words. I found this to be the most annoying of all flaws in your story. If you’re having trouble being creative when describing the same object in different sentences that are all together, look up different words and phrases for those things you are describing.

4) This my opinion, not actual criticism, but I think you need to rewrite/rework this fanfiction from scratch. The way it’s all put together is almost like how a child that hasn’t reached puberty, tried to put together one of those semi-complicated chemistry sets that the kid DID complete, but just did not do it right. You can tell what the youngster wanted to accomplish, but it didn’t have the desired affect.

Anyways, I hope you come back to finish or rework this story because I’d personally love to see you treat it with some love that it needs. Otherwise I’m just going to continue to harass you until you do come back. I may be a friendly xenomorph, but I’m a xenomorph nonetheless. I’ll be back.

Hey dude can you please continue this story I love it already

Dude this is a great no awesome story and I hope you'll continue this and I think when I speak for a lot of use when we now what's coming next when he said "clean you out differently" ;) (wink) (wink) (nudge) (nudge) and don't be a little scared to write something like that I'm just starting to write stories but people like you help so thanks and keep it going!

Things are getting interesting...

Hi, continue writing.
If they find out about them, they may use it to understand xenomorphs better, before their escape from the research lab.
Or he can use his relationship with her to establish peace between the two races.

well..that escalated quickly

I see her average xeno height of 6 feet or 7. That's about right.

I like this story

dang man i was happy and sad,happy that i finished a story so quickly and sad that its so short.

ch 1 I was in a hurry but it was ch 8 as a last .

Ow it just become intresting .

ch 4

It happened the same thing but it was in other film with simmlar way later but with the same compassion .

PLEASE FINISH, these Xenomorph x human stories are like weed, it makes me happy and I'm addicted :D but pwease finish it ;-;

This story needs to continue

Please continue this story. :)