What a fantastic fic! I loved the narration, very true to character, full of spark.

Love your writing style so much. Better than the game when it comes to dialogue in fact, with both this and your other story set in this universe. Shame there isn't too much of it, but I'll take what I can get. Eagerly awaiting any future work (should we be so fortunate)

You have a lot of patience for the minutiae, which I admire.

So this is breaking down booker Dewitt story to get back his daughter and all the ones that fail to get her well this could be interesting see ya next time

Nicely done with the portrayal of the Luteces. Very smart and very in-character. I enjoyed reading this very much :)

This is actually pretty good! Pretty good! You get the Luteces right, and you definitely show the variables that are put into play to help Booker! I would like to see in the future, a Booker or Bookers that actually succeed in saving Elizabeth from Comstock and Columbia...but DON'T succeed in wiping Comstock away from all timelines, thus don't achieve the Lutece's goal, and thus consider that attempt a failure. I look forward to the next chapter.

This is brilliant. You've captured both the dialogue and personalities of the Lutece's excellently, true to the game, in addition you have accounted for so many of the unseen things that could very well have happened behind the scenes including the extent to which the twins were involved. Extremely entertaining, very mind stimulating.

I'm really liking this so far! Your proper usage of grammar and writing style please me greatly. :) Keep up the good work!

This is amazing. It's like watching a more violent version of the movie Groundhog Day. Seeing the trial and error approach to helping Booker succeed is horrifying but makes so much sense.

That was great! I actually thought about making a similar fic but I'm glad you did it first. Well-thought-out, well-written, keep it coming.
Shame on me for not commenting on Croissant when it came out, that's one of my favourites as well. Both of these are complementing the game really nicely.

Loved it - please, more!

this is very entertaining i like it i also wonder about that swimming thing ne

This is really good so far! You write the Luteces excellently and I cannot wait to see what will happen to the next set of Bookers and Elizabeths.