He fucked up (I love this please make more thank you)

Not a bad beginning, it was a decently balanced introduction to whom I am assuming is our Alpha Female (based on the several women listed in the description, I assume this is a harem).

It introduced her feelings for Natsu, but I hope you'll illiterate her reasons for falling for him. My usual tactic is I have my females develop the feelings post introduction, but it's okay to have her have these feeling prior introduction, you just need a valid reason for her to have those feelings.

It was a little rushed perhaps; I learnt the hard way that it's better to take a month, write a few thousand decent words instead of one day and a thousand words that run along the plot too quickly. Take your time, your readers will appreciate you more for it.

For now, that's all I can think of, I hope you keep this up and get even better,

- James Merlaut

I should let you know, the roof is the next thing done after the skeleton, not the last thing. Otherwise, okay chapter

This is lame you are being too easy on Lucy, Mira shouldn’t get over her anger towards her and I swear if Natsu accepts Lucy when he gets back I am going to be mad.

I love this story whenever I read it! But the whole 'Wendy can't mark Natsu as her mate' always confuses me. Why is that? Can you please explain?

Please update

More pls

Your story really sucked me in !
This is the best story i read so far !

Please keep it up and write some more chapters ! I really enjoy your story

Great story. Wish you would update it again

Well I can only imagine you either abandoned this story or fanfiction as a whole due to the story not being updated for over a year soooooo... :(
It's good remarkably similar basically the same as another older story but this is still good
If you ever pick up again I'll be here to read it
Can't wait
Thx ;)

I will continue reading

Is this still being updated?

Please update

That was exciting to read.

Okay. I really like your story. I'm very curious to see what else happened while Natsu was on his trip and to figure out what the truth is. I know you said you weren't going to take people's suggestions anymore but I wanted to make some anyway. Personally I ship NaWen so I was happy they got together. I think Lisanna should join the harem. Natsu and Lis have loved each other since they were children so I think it would be great. You already mentioned that she was jealous so it would fit in. Maybe she goes to see her sister but really just wants to see Natsu. He had just got out the shower so he's just in a towel. Lisanna licks her lips and wets. Natsu smirks and walks over to her whispering in her ear that he can smell her arousal and then boom, take it from there. Another one you should add is Erza. She is sad because Jellal keeps coming and going. Erza is tired of feeling lonely and never knowing when he'll be back. Natsu can tell her that he feels her heat and can sense that she has needs that need to be satisfied and boom go from there. You should continue this fic. If you need more suggestions or details just let me know. :)