How old is Harry?

I want to lick Faoras abs, smell and kiss her plump butt.

I know that you said anonymous reviews will be deleted and, because of how long ago you wrote this, you probably won’t read it. However I just have to point out that quite a lot of this story technically makes no sense due to your atrocious grammar, spelling, sentence structure and borderline illiteracy, as you seem to use the wrong words for something every other sentence. While your plot ideas have merit I would seriously suggest getting a beta or even using aids such as a dictionary or thesaurus. While that may sound insulting I don’t mean it to be as they could really help you improve your writing. I’d also suggest reading actual books, fiction or non fiction, to get a feel for a better standard of story.

i dont know what to say about the whole thing u r just using harry potter's name and not including the magical world ...
i think its wrong on a very fundamental level
and ur showing the magical world as not have common sense.. cmon man this is pretty much the scene of every crossover u write be a bit fresh and stop flaming hp universe every world has its flaws and every gov has corruption either magical or mundane...u point this out too much
and ur habit of just mixing up two or three universes it makes reading cumbersome not fun...
this is not flaming pal u r doing very good but i just pointed out what i had a prob with rest its ur story se ur storyline

that is both not your call and extremely rude. if you don't like the fic that is one thing but there is no need to be a jerk.

shit fic don't read

I have read quite a few of your stories. Some I have troubles getting into because there are just too many crossovers. This story I am having real difficulty getting into because I don't recognize anything really. Limbo is the world? From what story movie or tv show?Harry is the only starting character I recognize and just barely. Is there any reason you are using Harry? This is pre cannon Harry you are using so far. Are you even going to return to his world to sort anything? By that I mean Hogwarts and Voldemort, Dumbledore. I am sorry but I am just wondering were Harry Potter comes into this story? Or are you just borrowing his name and pre cannon background? If so I can't really consider it a Harry Potter story. To me it's just not Harry Potter If you are not going to have him deal with Cannon issues at all. But if you abducted him pre cannon to show how he has changed to deal with cannon situations differently I can still consider that a Harry Potter story. I briefly scanned several of the upcoming chapters and can't find anything of Harry Potter but the name. So basically all you have as far as I can tell of Harry Potter in this story is that he is a kid whos parents died protecting him and was placed with abusive relatives and at some point realizes he has supernatural powers. To me this appears to be a superman universe story starring an OC named Harry Potter with some crossovers to places I am not sure of. I don't mean to rant but I was Looking for a Harry Potter story or possible crossover. I have enjoyed some of your other stories I just couldn't recognize Harry Potter in this one at all.

Fucking great

I for one would be interested in finding the complete story. do tell where I can find it and I'll give my critiques on that one. I really do hate censoring a work of art, but I also understand the need to sometimes keep things "Kid Friendly."

k just saying it was the blue kryptonite that cancelled powers and black that split the human and kryptonian sides off just so you know bit good story

Great story I really liked it good job writing the story.

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Karazik you never read megamatt09 work if you still don’t like harems and smut

Forced harem ruined it. Not worth the read. Try better next time and smut is not the be all end all of teenage hormonal imbalance. Oh well

good