This was really good, your grammar and sentence structure could use some work, but the story itself was sweet and something I hadn't read before. Very well done.

Awwwwww... I loved this story! I loved the idea of a wolf receiving a second chance after his imprint rejects him. I loved how his imprint learned something she shouldn't have, but chose to not take the selfish and cruel road. I loved how he slowly disconnected from his imprint and connected to another.

Sam, though, he seemed promising in the beginning, but then took a slightly dark and, definitely, bitter turn. But thankfully, has come around.

Poor Bella, she truly did go through and suffer a lot also. Paul and she work well together with all they endured.

Other than some grammar things, I do find one thing very disappointing... I would have loved more time with Bella and Paul together, bantering, teasing, connecting as a couple does in the beginning (no not the lemons, the growing together as a couple things). I think it would have made the already fun story even more so, especially with what each of them went through! ;)

The epilogue was certainly cute also, but what are the twins? Identical boys/girls? Fraternal boys/girls/one of each? :)

I suppose there is one other thing I would have liked to know more about... in the beginning, one of the main reasons she moved to Forks was to be with her father and spend time with him before he was taken from this world, like her friend had to endure. Therefore, did Charlie know about what happened to his little girl? If so, how did he feel about what she was going through then, now? If not, did he notice her inner turmoil and try to reach out at all? He's a cop, surely he had to have noticed her little "securities" she established in her room, did he do, or say anything? Since she wanted to be in Forks to spend time with him, how did she keep him a part of her life now with Paul?

Okay... please know, I only ask these things because I sort of flew through this story because I enjoyed what I was reading and would have liked to read and know more. ;) :D In other words, thank you for writing and sharing. :)

16. Taken
then Alien venom bitten both then herself with seven then too late with three with best friends with aliens/they with him then the Six found her guilty of crimes then Taken from here the where you newborns are leaving then then Head-Cord then with the kids wit the eight kids's the Attacked in their new homes the Slaughttered for coats fled forced to roam then they were within a Unicat then merged then with the five Exploding good Within there are Dead then brought there the cause of death was murder with the other ones good these one blood bonded illegally the rest ripped her/they with the Cullens/covens apart bring them we want them dead then verdict death by needle then with her/others as well then good guard they broke the rule are punished then too late Skinned alive then too late it was too late the cause of death was natural causes now go they been ripped from here good Bitten freely they can't die blew up train them there then too late in time Nothingness was old age was organ failure as all of it brain death destroy them then too late That was it ashes then now families each both were in a wake then too late they were young-looking again from the alien venom did not age with two rescued and saved crunched freely then vanished good departed then too late wiped out from here then it was gone then Never was alive were aboard nuked wit they with five with three merged then with ISS Nuked from here then Blew apart then bodies in the lab good we discovered them with allies they are guilty from here good rip them apart now then too late They fled to Vulcan with as all of them merged fusion blew up shattered let humans mourn again twice see dead then then too late Arrival to Vulcan then Suddenly with more followed but crashed as all of them forged a planetary base then too late never was on Earth it really happened stopped aging then they never had kids Leo was grown so they imprinted had kids.

This was amazing! It’s been awhile since I’ve read a fresh Paul/Bella story.

Great story.

Aww this was a great ending to the story

please continue to update your story

Please update soon

gthen Bella's neck tore venom then she with best friends Changed into Newborns fled ten too late then Were undead frim snakes then then Slipped lost control viciously ofically Killed both aliens/Vulcans fighting for survival dring blood as all to Him by Blood sharing emotionless like one yiu aee guity Isabella Punished for life as a Cullen take them out the guard found then you there who created you tell our masters she's blocking from us good then her screams was heard with they then then assaulted her/them then then Abusing her hardest then beaten then Both wrists with venom coursing herself Was experimented by augmenting but With three with they with the one god You are punished Isabella ours as Sex slaves Tore from here both where you thing are leaving pets mine the health problems was ill but sicker frailer buy lost as all of color Both head-cord then brought there with as all of them good lost too much mostly much more blood but the Disease is Reyerson's Disease with brain surgeries hair grew back longer with bangs chic but in a shag fashion found by both they were Next exposed to our kind is dead with Freaks nuked freely bitten her with toxic venom saved her life with theirs died there both nuked rest bring them good with they we sentenced them to death she is not taught of the law is punished as a official Cullen with them as Cullens Nothingness with both with they ripped apart then ATOMIZED By Vaporized who done to her/him/they Volturi destroy froim here is scarred but in turmoil Sliced wjth her/him/hey Both lost with eight with him/they with witnesses good broughtthere good with them VAPORIZED Burning both see dead then too late Bella was into agonzing pain crying of the attack violated beyond repair then too late was not human so he/they Alice who did to you herself was a private person oh my god she is growling at us by studying us is civilized more controlled but studious Then herself had his officially truest blood like from the Vampire Diaries blown up with him/they then Both from here but with they lost too much color to their skins we report she had mated with a Werewolf sharing his blood by Marking him as her Husband is a Original like The Vampire Diaries what the verdict tear them apart we do not need them now Guards! Death to them with these ones are put to sleep forever then ripped freely herself used superspeed then Kail-fi-flieee! in fluently but expertly Vulcan tongues challenged from Edward help us/they we been bitten oh my god then too late her voice took on a cold tone emotionless As the dawn of our days for as all Tomorrows as from the time of the Beginning it is today it is now I Shall make my Choice This One! herself had her hair Styled in a mnarriageable ritual Vulcanoid Updo with Vulcanoid teenaged Ocampan ears with her Robes were rich Vulcan marriage robes finger pointed at Chris Pine as her ritualized champion acted coldly but with icy calm like Arlene Martel was T'Pring of Vulcan someone took a picture of her with they with two actors Sir! she Invoked the Koont'ut'fi'fliee is a ritual passion fight with the ah'woon and the Lirpa What?! he had a temper was fiery but more bad Strom Excuse me ulp yikes oh crap who are these people hold it oh my god they were the ones done this act the Vulcans too late in time the damagers was done to her/they what is that aroma oils/massaged creams nice hairstyle what in The Name of Uncle Sam are you dressed my robes gasp Alice they were killed but murdered Bella you died yes but resurrected can't breed they did this to us/they then at night into the roaring than sixteen level merged was a House for them Bella and Paul had a fiery but more Wildest Heated Telepathic Passionate healing make out session then a very more not so human strangest alien attraction between her and him suddenly Kissing more stronger and powerful then too late suddenly a voice echoing loudest he was her truest Long-Term imzadi nuked with them, with the kids/they but things we three blew free with three lost there aboard then were as all of them above the planet Earth then were with more rescued but saved with Bree and Diego Nuked with as all of from around the world's as with more aliens/Vulcans's both frozen overfrozen solid nuked vanished forbidden to mate to marry bring them they are exiled on Vulcan Irina/others with both die then too late were murdered then too late with them to as all of them it was too late to as all of very far as all of more from around the world's youth perished good they are dead then it was too late they were on Vulcan safely oh ugh get a room Romeo oh man he's busy with a Woman turkeys gasp um Sis they are kissing more urgh she was so grossed out Excuse me oh man pack he's in love with her Leah could not stand their romance were Intimate but more very private oh man cut it out Don Juan you are busy with her finding you so handsome a Womanizer like who Captain James T Kirk of the Enterprise gasp no way team then suddenly he had two words from him oh god she is putting me in flames it's 2020 by now.

OMG! I absolutely love this story! Absolutely cannot wait for more! Please update soon! Will they get there on time? What has happened to Bella? What was Sam thinking? Argh!so many questions! I'll be impatiently waiting for the next chapter!

I LOVE this! Cannot wait for more!

Thank you so much for adding to this and please do not leave it where you’re hanging please continue. I love what you’re writing and I’m going to look at the other things that you’ve written but please continue with this one thank you.

This is a very good story, looking forward 2c how it all comes together!

Wonder what Riley is going to do. And Sam ordering Paul to be away from his imprint is stupid.

loved this chapter wish there was more pls update