This fic was beautiful. I feel like Ghazan gets the least attention in fanwork, for whatever reason. Seeing such a well-written fic all for him made me so happy. :) I love the parts where he reflects on his friends (especially when he imagines their prisons), and Ming-Hua and their mud fight, and the way you focus on him being depressed and losing hope. It's easy to defer to "yay, Mingzan!" because yeah, Mingzan is a precious rare thing but this fic has so much more to it. Excellent work.

Interesting.

mmmm nice, very nice

It's so good, I almost could feel how Ghazan was suffering his prisonment. I love all of your Mingzan fics :)

Thank you, thank you, thank you! Yeah, you're right, Ghazan is under-appreciated and needs more love (although I love every Red Lotus member, to be honest). I like how you portray him, in this fic and in Before, too. Usually I find swear words out of place in a fic, but they suit Ghazan nicely. That bit with Guru Lalala cracked me up, my favorite part of entire fic (but it was hard to choose). I half-hoped the "fighting dirty" in the mud will turn into different kind of dirty, but nevermind, you can write it into another one. I mean, I hope you write more fics, because they are one of the best LOK fics I've read, and I'm hungry for more Mingzan. Seriously, what the heck is the fandom doing?
Thanks again, have a good day.

Nice fanfic dude. Nobody believes in Mingzan, and I'm not positive both are dead. Keep it up!

Mhm. I'm still not sure what to think about that one :D
On the one hand, it is a very interesting portrayal of how Ghazan keeps the sanity at bay, on the other hand I was missing more hints at Mingzan. I'm addicted, I know ;)
It's safe to say, that "Before" is still my favourite one :) Nonetheless, I did enjoy this one too but I consider it's expressions more humpy than in "Before", at least in regard to Mingzan and Ghazan's relationship towards the guards.
So while you've been more focused on creating a profound atmosphere with rather romantic traits in "Before" this one was mostly centered around Ghazan (which I didn't mind THAT much, at all :D). Most of the time you've managed to portray him very fitting just like in regard to the guards, him usually feeling lazy but caught off guard by his lack of occupation and thereby getting restless. The other, way minor part, however, was mostly riddled with his dark, almost inappropriate humour in reference to Ming-Hua's lack of arms. No wonder she keeps hitting him ...
Speaking of "hitting": I am again fascinated at how you keep these two characters acting around each other without getting TOO romantic and still be able to keep them in character ... Even though they tend to get very ... ruthless at times. It doesn't surprise me that Ming-Hua doesn't hold herself back in a fight, she seems to be quite combative, but I was surprised to read that Ghazan pays her with her own coin. I would have expected him to go more easy on her. In some way, that's a refreshing variety (even it still appears strange) ... still, I can't get over the fact that he kicks her away when she was in his arms. Seriously, why? I was hoping for a romantic moment there!
And Ming-Hua used to have a LOVER? Someone other than GHAZAN?! What a nice "coincidence" she dumped first one. I'm quite relieved :)

Anyway, back to Ghazan: You kept his demeanor quite suitable, - and like I said before - also in regard to his guards. Appearing ever so friendly to them only to curse them in his thoughts. Fits him well :) However, I stumbled against the fact that he continuously refers to them as "pigs". While his other verbal fights with them as well as him acting ever so insane was very entertaining, said occasion was a teeny-weeny bit over the top. No offense, though :)

However, I like the beginning sentence of this One-Shot! Quite unexpected yet welcome :) And it is also a very thoughtful idea of yours to let his determination grew before finally concluding with Ming-Hua's first line in the series ;)
Furthermore, I did find it very nice that you mentioned Unalaq even though I'm not sure yet whether Ghazan and Co did know about his betrayal BEFORE their imprisonment or after, even though I would vote for "before". Anyway, it is nice that you mentioned him along with Zaheer and P'Li. A question: Why should P'Li being guarded by GIANTS? Did I miss something there?!

I did find the delimitations you've put in there quite helpful yet they were sometimes set too short after each other, especially in the first paragraphs. Apart from that, they did help to make the reading way more pleasant!

Did I forget something? Oh, yes, the stars. The most famous part about Ghazan being in prison (and being ever so sad about his too-much growing hair :D Very entertaining, indeed. But poor Ghazan :)).
It's a very creative idea of yours to invent star constellations like the bison or the dragon! Very appropriate! And also a great adding to let him wonder about the secrets of the universe, like other dimensions ...

See you around, I hope!
Elvira