I'd assume Ruby is a pretty reserved person when it comes to romance since she's pretty innocent. While there are exceptions, I find that the pace at which they story progresses with its romance between Anton and Ruby is pretty insane. Like yeesh, a bit rushed like the reviewer said before me.

If you're pausing in a quote, you can just use one set of "..." instead of three. We get the idea the same way, it's just more pleasant to read through.

Another RWBY fic, another cancerous OC. What a surprise.

I just finished reading chapter 1 and so far I am really intrigued by this idea. Dispite how well you have written it so far, it is definately nowhere near perfect. My biggest gripes so far are that it has a super fast pase and is a little hard to follow, the seperation between scenes are a little too small, and there are some spelling/gramatical mistakes all throughout the chapter. I'm not hating on this fic because of those, I'm just trying to help improve this already awesome story.

Does Russia exist in Remnant for there to be Russians? It'd be cool

Anton has so many edges. He's like a sun, a burning sun. Edgy OC's acide, I do like that Doctor Who reference with A Town Called Christmas. This story is okay so far, but the romance seems way too forced. I mean, they know each other for maybe two days, and they kiss. That's why I stopped reading OC stories for so long, if there's romance, it's way too forced. I don't think that you'll go back and fix the romance, but it just doesn't make sense.

If I didn't know any better, I would say that this was a RWBY and Destiny crossover.

You're really pulling a Destiny on this? Nicely done, though.

Now that's a twist.

See that you got some destiny inspiration and also can't wait to read the next chapter

I wonder if that kind of thing actually happens when you die.

Keep up the good work

I resent the fact that u said that Pyrrha had "authentic" roman armor when she clearly does not.

A few things you got wrong:
1. It's Pyrrha, not Pyyra
2. It's Sun Wukong, not Son
3. And finally it's General Ironwood

I found about two Doctor Who references in this story.

Anyway good job! I like the story! That's all I can say!