LOVE IT

omg updateeeeeee This is a really good story. Hope you update sooooon!

Yo, try not make Elsa Op.
It would be boring, like it would have no struggle.
It's good to make Elsa good at stuff, but not making her Ms. Perfect plus Elsa still couldn't really control her power, if you would like to know about her more or watch frozen again with different plot then watch 'Once upon a time' season 4.

Write with your style but consider listening to critiscm, it would make you better.

Alright. Peace

THIS IS GOOD MAKE ELSA GET HURT LIKE WHEN ELSA AND HICCUP TELL EACH OTHER ABOUT THERE FEELINGS AND THEN ELSA I SEPARATED FROM HIM AND IT TURNS OUT SHE'S ALIVE sorry for the capitals just realised they were on

Your story is really nice. Sometimes you must not listen to criticism, only if it becomes to much like with one of my stories, but now it's all fine.
I hope you do post new chapers, cause there are people out here who actually like Mary Sues

Are you serious with the title? Does it refer to your redo or the story itself? And since you've deleted the first iteration, there's no need to put any reference to it since people can't access it to understand what you were referring about such as your comment about the Pope and the title itself. This is a blank slate, treat it as such.

Oh and Mary Sue Elsa and occ jerk Hiccup again. Seriously?

I like the second chapter but you have it out for Toothless and Elsa don't you ;) anyways I personally don't think toothless will just let Hiccup be toyed like that even if mind controlled because he has a will and he could probably break free of that control and protect Hiccup but nevertheless good story and just keep writing but make sure you take your time

A much better story I give it a great score but one question shouldn't Hiccup be saying "this is what you called cold this is the middle of summer in Berk and that's what dad used to say" because you now Berk

Nice, better. In my oppinion. Not much makes dark AU. I think your first but i could be wrong.