Super robot monkey team force prime power primape force, plus sayin (i. ball z plus plus plus plus plus) blood infusion plus beast boy i.e. changling equals daaaaaannnnnggggggg!

Is Starfire gonna appear in the fic and be part of BB's harem? Cause if she is, you could do this: Have her be just as busty as (or even bustier than) Raven, and be attracted to Beast Boy instead of Robin. Raven could be worried that she might take BB from her, but she admits she doesn't mind sharing him with her or other women. You could also have her be dressed in her original New 52 outfit from Red Hood and the Outlaws

Is Starfire gonna show up in this story? If she is, maybe you could have her be just as busty or even bustier than Raven and now be attracted to Beast Boy instead of Robin. Raven would be worried that she might steal BB from her, but Star assures that she doesn't mind sharing him with her. Also she could be wearing her original New 52 outfit.

This chapter is fine. It honestly should have been merged with the first chapter, since the ending of the second chapter sets up the rest of the story much better than the first.

I did notice some repeated dialogue though. It's stated twice that Garfield knows Star is a big girl and that she can take care of herself. Makes certain parts repetitive and a bit awkward. Still don't like Starfire leaving her new home, new friends/family, new life, and new boyfriend behind, but at this point I just have to accept it.

I'm also going to try to guess who Jason, Sarah, and Ronnie are. Jason Rusch, Sarah Charles, and Ronnie Raymond. I think you were giving Firestorm's alter egos a cameo, but I could be looking into it too deeply.

Overall, the second chapter is an improvement but it still suffers from not being part of the first chapter. The second chapter does what the first one should have and that unfortunately hurts the story's flow. 6.5 out of 10.

The chapter's too short for me to really make any serious judgement, unfortunately, since it hasn't really gotten the chance to make an impact on me as a reader yet.

I don't like the retcon of Beast Boy's backstory, though I guess I get why you made the change. I can live with it despite my dislike.

Also not a fan of Starfire leaving Earth, seems like that threw out her character development. The implication is, that despite all the time spent building up to the kiss, Robin and Starfire broke up regardless of everything they had been through. And Earth was her new home. The Titans were her friends, her family. I just have a hard time believing that she would just leave this new life she had made for herself behind. Raven's disappearance is also odd. Over five seasons the Titans became true companions who would there for each other until the end. Feels like the characters haven't changed at all if it's so easy for them to go their own ways without telling the others their plans or giving them some means of communication. Did their time as a team, as a family, mean nothing to them?

Also, why would Beast Boy fool his friends if he knew Japanese? What?

Ultimately though, those details mean little in the grand scheme of things. I'm sure this chapter is referencing stuff that I am completely unfamiliar with as a viewer. But overall I would give this first chapter a 6 out of 10. Not bad, but not that great either. Though I have a feeling things will improve later in the story.

This is a really great story. It’s very exciting and awesome. It would be nice if you could continue and finish this story. Please?

Continue pleasseeeeee

Looks really good I love this story

I was wondering are we going to get a chapter about beast boy past

I like the way you blend the different universes together perfectly done like you took your time before you wrote it A

When I fiat saw this story I fifth have an account so I couldn't save this story, and I've been looking for it forever. Man this story is lit AF man. I really like the way you write and the way the story goes, hope you updated soon

hahaha I'm sorry i know it was spelling error or typo but when atlas said 'whats going on here cheetah's are not that fat'! I lost it didn't expect that there. stories great aside from that.

i would like more.

Well, it was alright. You keep making spelling mistakes like putting 'toke' instead of took, 'of' instead of off, and I found the lemon while good to be more descriptive than all the fight scenes in this chapter put together. I say all this not to be discouraging, but in the hopes that you will improve in these areas.

Now, that said, the fight scenes were actually good, they could just stand to be far more descriptive. Like, instead of saying "X-character threw a punch-" put "X-character threw a haymaker or a roundhouse kick." Something of that nature, you get the idea right? Anyway, I hope this helps, and wish you the best of luck on the next chapter.

-Bubbajack

Sunday March 20, 2016.

Lol. Beast Boy was being such a pervert.