Ben and Jerry, I see what you did there...

Rosescneederland. Perfect.

internally fangirls

I can just imagine when she was walking away from him after she stomped on his knee the Shakira song was playing

This is definitely my favourite representation of neo/torchwick. I see that alot of the time people write neo as being particulary dependent on roman, but you show them both as the strong personalities they are! I thought you wrote roman really well, making it plain he's besotted (is that the right word?) with neo, but still a complete asshole.
I also loved that neo stomped roman's foot both as payback and to get roman to lean forward. Really fantastic story!

This fic made me smile. ice job on it.

Hoooooooo loved I think Neo should be a bit...harder to get but awesome!

Oh my goodness, that bit at the end was incredible. I must say, you have given me a new appreciation for Roman Torchwick and Neopolitan.

This chapter flowed much better than the previous one, but there were still a lot of spelling errors and a few periods that should have been questions marks, etc.

My one issue with this chapter contentwise is that I couldn't catch any indication that Roman was sitting down when Neo flung ice cream at him, even when going back and rereading several paragraphs. If you could clear up that he was reclining on the couch with her or sitting at his desk or whatever, then that would clear up some confusion. Roman inexplicably being at a lower altitude than Neo for a moment briefly broke my immersion.

But let me finish again wish this: My goodness, these two are great together. You wrote them so well. I love how, despite Neo never speaking a single word, you've given her so much personality. Roman's one-sided chatter with her did a lot to fill in the gaps. Just glorious.

You may claim to be a fledgling writer, but I'd say you're off to a great start. Thanks so much for the read. Cheers!

I was wondering what was up when a 2-chapter story had 24 reviews. Whoo boy, the snark on that man is unbelievable! I was laughing out loud throughout the entire first chapter, his attitude was just so snappy and perfect and in-character. I don't know as much about Neopolitan, but I enjoyed the way you wrote her as well.

The first-person present style took a bit to adjust to, but I don't think it was a bad choice. In fact, being directly inside Roman's head was probably what made it so great.

There were some issues with how the chapter flowed, such as the exposition in the very beginning about the fluctuations in the dust market feeling like a bit of a slog, but the dialogue was fantastic, as were the little snippets of Torchwick's thoughts. It was an interesting and delightful moment when I realized that initial exposition was actually Torchwick running numbers in his head and reviewing recent operations. Oh, and the scathing commentary of Vale society! It made the world feel so much more real in a way the show has yet to explore.

The biggest issue I found with the chapter was of many hiccups in spelling and punctuation—particularly hyphenation. For example, all near each other in the same pragraph or two, we have:

"A marked improvement over warehouse 15's accomidations." (Should be accommodations.)
"Hand stitched jacket" (Pretty sure should be hand-stitched)
"How long have I been staring at her." (Should be a question mark instead of a period?)

In other words, editing for basic spelling and grammar and such would tighten up the chapter considerably. Even with the errors I noticed, it was a lovely read. I thoroughly enjoyed a glimpse into the mind of Remnant's snarkiest villain.

Cheers!

Wonderful fluff. Loved the "I get that a lot" scene.

My god, they are literally perfect for each other. I'm internally screaming right now. This is beautiful. It's sweet and sexy the same time. Gahhh, I love it so much. Thank you so much for writing this!

PLEASE WRITE MORE! It's so sexy

Goodness, that was fantastic. I love Roman's numerous musings on Neo, and the snark is off the charts. Roman's mostly one-sided conversations are a joy because of that. He really should learn to pull that back a bit before Neo permanently injures him, but it seems to be working in his favor in some way, so eh. All in all, thank you for writing this, it was a joy to read.

This is definitely my favourite Gelato fic so far. You've captured both of them extremely well and I love it.

I lack the the vocabulary to adequately describe how much I loved Neo and Romans interactions. The characterisation was spot on and I'm delighted to say this was extremely well written and exceptionally fun to read; thanks for taking the time to write and share what you have with us.