I love it. Good story
Need more
Want more

Hope u continue this fic soon quite interesting if u ask me hope to know on now what is going to happen to luffy n shanks soon hehe

PLEASE UPDATE!

This is great! I hope Luffy doesn't befriend Shanks and get soft as a result, that would be pathetic. I've always wanted to read a dark Luffy fanfic but for some reason people don't like to write them and the ones that exist aren't that great. I hope you don't give this up )

Continue continue ¡

K so I did a review earlier of all the bad thongs now for the good things!
So you have the kind of plot I really like a lot! I really can't wait for more even of you make mistakes! I just told you the things in the earlier post because you could probably use it in an essay in the future but whatever! Love the plot love the story with a few minor changes this could be a master piece. Not perfect because there 's no such thing but better if not really good.

this seems like it would be an interesting story

I really Like this idea and I love the way this is going but TBH you should put more character development add more dialogue instead of action and don't switch the point of view from Luffy to shanks to Makino etc. it just makes it confusing an a little boring