Beautiful and creepy all at once! This is so well done!

Ah, this fic has exactly the kind of subtext I die for. 'I am Loki, and I can well see why my brother lost his senses.' Even though nothing happens there is yet something predatory about his behaviour, something greedy, and it's confirmed in how Jane can feel the snare around her. 'A queen you shall be.' He is not subtle. Your final words are nicely done too.

Good story. You likely meant it to be this way, but it feels unfinished. I for one would not object if you decided to expand it ;)

Oh man...you've achieved Loki creepiness to a whole new level. Job well done! I enjoyed this. Thank you!

Wow! Fluff or not, this was an excellent story, well done! I truly enjoyed reading it, I prefer to read dark and nuanced pieces anyways, and yours was wonderful. Ah, that last sentence was just the best! What I really loved was how you conveyed so much in so few words! Less is more, in this case. I really wish you would continue, but I can see it being complete. Thank you for the wonderful one shot.

Wow, you're right, creepy. I'll have to look up the song.

Please do more!

Great job! Loki is perfectly in character, being just enough hostile and mysterious to slightly creep you out but irresistible at the same time. I love the tension between them, poor Jane she has no chance but to eventually yield. I'm definitely up for a sequel ;-)

Please please continue this story! Too good...!

Sequel?

Loved it! Spectacular tension. I'd love for you to continue this.

This is awesome and very well written. Loki's character is spot on and the tension between them is perfect. I could see this being a multi chapter fic. If you ever decided to do a sequel that would be great!

Wow that was a great intro if you ever plan to continue this story! You did a perfect job of leaving your readers with enough angst to want more!

Angsty. But I enjoyed it.

Its shameful how excited I get when u post. Another beauty!