Wow, I kind of want to say you had a bit to much purple prose in there but all of your metaphors were really spot on and hit me right in the feels... there were a lot of very long sentences with a lot of adjectives crammed into them - I want to say too much - but again, I kind of feel like it also serves the story because it kind of echoes how Naruto is feeling, like he wants to say everything all at once because he’s running out of time but such a long sentence uses up all your breath and leaves you gasping as well... hmm... I feel very, ambivalent, about that stuff I suppose. But your story was still very moving and lovely. I really like the way you got straight to the heart of the emotions you wanted to explore in that one moment instead of telling a conventional narrative about Hinata going on a mission, getting poisoned, a hospital prognosis scene, all of that stuff... especially if the ending would have been, “and then she died”..! We didn’t really need a resolution to that part anyway because it wasn’t the point... yeah no this was a really great story :)

For some reason I just want MORE of this heartache. What could come next! Oh the thoughts! Great job

Words cannot describe how amazing this is. good job.

Damn, tears just fell. This is beautiful.. and freaking heart breaking! I kinda wish and son't wish for continuation.

This was so beautiful. This really needs a second chapter!

This was absolutely tragically beautiful. The way you told the story and the descriptions given made my heart clench. It made me cry. Literally. What a wonderful story. Thank you for sharing this!

Great fanfic! I enjoyed reading this awesome fanfic! Thank you for this epic story! It was a pleasure to read it. I love it, how you split your fanfic into sections. The division has pleased me very well. :) 3 I smiled while reading. And also was sad while reading. The mix of emotions was great! :)

Argh, the feels, they hit hard. Very nice.

This is so beautiful, i'm get teary-eyes

Gahhhh, it's sooooo beautiful. I can't get over it.

Such a creative way to breifly cover NaruHina's beautiful relationship and family.

The pacing was perfect. An interesting juxtaposition of Past and Present. It read very nicely. Especially the repetition of paragraphs beginning with 'He loved her...'

Individually, Naruto and Hinata are characters very dedicated and determined not to give up. I like how you write them together. It's like they have an even stronger dedication. It's very in character and befitting of these two.

You are a superstar of description and imagery. You make some fairly corny compliments from Naruto seem realistic and natural. You really immerse your reader in the couples love.

As I mentioned earlier, I am always initially unhappy with ambiguous endings. However after reflecting on it, it's far better not knowing what happens. Because the point of the story is two people who love each other vow to never give up. And there is beauty in that regardless if death comes or not.

I really hope you will one day write a multi-chapter story about NaruHina's family life... I'm holding out for it XP

You'll have a regular reviewer in me that's for sure.

Thanks for this little gem, into the favourites it goes!

you're just the best at expressing those kind of bitter-sweet but cheesy feelings in a way that makes 'em seem not-at-all cheesy and just so so real, like someone is literally planting those emotions inside of your own heart XD it's magic. magical nata!

Szia!
Mint már említettem korábban, a kritikát akkor magyarul írnám. :)
Egyelőre csak ülök a gép előtt, és próbálom összeszedni a gondolataimat, ami igazából elég nehéz.
Gondoltam rá menet közben, hogy másolgatnom kellene azokat a részeket a novellából, amik nagyon betaláltak, gyönyörűek voltak vagy csak úgy nagyon tetszettek. Aztán rájöttem, hogy akkor szinte az egészet idézhetném, és mindenhová odakommentelhetném, hogy jaj. Jaj, a szívem. Vagy valami hasonlóan értelmes.
Csak lestem a leírásaidon, azon, hogy hogyan fejezted ki Naruto érzéseit, a szeretetét... Nagyon szép volt. Tényleg. Erre a legjobb szó az, hogy gyönyörű. Pedig ezzel aztán végképp nem szoktam dobálózni, szóval nekem elhiheted.
Ahogy olvastam, az volt bennem, hogy ez nem csak szimplán szomorú, de benne van a pakliban. Mármint soha nem lehet tudni, hogy meddig tart az élet, és simán előfordulhat, hogy előáll egy ilyen helyzet. És ez csak még szívszorítóbbá tette az egészet.
Ez a páros... egyszerűen... nyuff. Tudod, hihetetlen, hogy mennyire látszik Narutón, Hinatán és a pároson is, hogy szereted őket. Külön-külön és együtt is. Nem tudom megmagyarázni, de tényleg, érezni lehet, és ez olyan jó. :)
Az angolod is nagyon jó, szerintem szépen fogalmazol, nagyon ügyes vagy, és büszke lehetsz a ficre és magadra is. Köszönöm, hogy olvashattam, nagyon tetszett! :) Írj még a párossal, aztán értesíts, mert erre mindig vevő leszek.
Ruby

Great story. Sad but with a hint of hope. I liked how you still gave both Naruto and Hinata that never give up mentality. Awesome job.

I loved this story was very beautiful it made me a little teary eyed but it was still beautiful.