ooh, i like this ovo

Cool chapter !
I hope we read us ;D
July

I like how you put manical laughs, not in a bad way though. It just seems more intense

I don't really see Jazz laughing. I see her screaming and then crying, then storming up to her room.

this is really good I wish I had a little more details on how danny looks cuz right now im imagining him normal with huge claws like the witch from left 4 dead

Good, but you are correct on the grammar errors. If you are struggling with the grammar, look for a Beta who is good with grammar.
I would help, but currently I have three or more documents I have to edit.

... danny? ... why? { walks away sadly shaking head crying }

Jake and maddie; U SHALL DIE!*Gets my weapons* u can help kill them with me danny and darky! What would u like to use? The Glock 17 or the nunchucks? I'm using a Glock 11, daggers, and my sword plus bamboo stick. Lets go and kill those monsters! *starts to scream like a crazy person* oh great chapter and update soon!

O-O Holy crud Phantom!
I get your mad at your killers but do they have to beg for mercy beneath you?

Nice! A few grammatical errors, but over all a good chapter.

I loved when he laughed! It terrified me so much! That is when you truly know someone is so terrified and shocked. Good job with it. :)

Oh dang. My face was like :0. So excite

I want an update even though this was published 8 hours ago... I love this first chapter

Omg! Update soon!

Interesting. I'd love to see where you go from here. This will be on my follow list!