I am crying so sad

Wow..This was really deep. And so sudden...Not what I was expecting at all. I would recomend returning to this story and keep updating the chapters and make them stronger. They plot was strong.

Uh oh! What will happen next I wonder?

The flow is improving vastly compared to the first chapter. You have some grammar issues, but its certainty a improvement!

There were a few times where I was laughing out loud reading this story. Especially the dialogue, those one-liners were priceless. As you noted yourself the flow is a little jagged, so continue to work on that.

You fixed a lot of the things I pointed out to you. The format of the story is very organized I feel. I followed it clearly this time through :) Keep it up!

You have the potential to be a better writer, but you need to work on describing the scenes. Don't write one sentence and move on to talking. You need to flow everything better. But it's not a bad start. Also, try to look over your spelling.. You mispelled tutor... It's not tutour, it's tutor. But we all learn these things through time.
Good luck and keep trying.