its a bit annoying with the grant says ras says and skye says you should get ride of it and replace you speech with more detail for example
"I like cats" said angle holding up a stuffed cat.
not angle says I like cats. its really boring overall the plot is great I love the story

You should change the name when you involve a character (ex: Grant young man)and use different verb. Reading Grant ask/says and Skye says got a bit boring

Amazing first chapter:)

great intro to the story. plz update