very nice. ixlove ALL YOUR STORIES! HAZACHILZOUT AND PIZZACATDAVID! I LOVE YOUUUUUUUUUU…
i am not sure that you know me but i hope you know my bro... skyraidr

I would love to voice but i have no equipment or recording equipment, Or experience, but i look forward to it on youtube, will your other stories get the voice acting

This was a bit of a sad story, but it's a very good one too.

no offence but this was a bit confusing but still good story nice to see that tears is still going on

In the random letters you spelled fang,jass and feed in it. XD

I want to say thanks for letting me use the chica's incident with puppet also the first chapter to puppet the untold story is now out please tell me if you can't find it I am not entirely sure its available to the public it says its up but just in case thank you.

hello um I know this is a long shot but is it possible I can use the chica mouth breaking part in my soon to be created fan fiction called Puppet story retold. I do not mind if I can't but it would be very helpful. I will give you full credit and I will not use the part when puppet takes over the world or attempts.

Wow this is a deep story yet it is so intesting

This is getting to an final.

A truly amazing story to a truly amazing prequel. Well done once again! Hats off to you!

I hope Foxy can escape.

Alrighty.. This is awesome, but the kids need to find out they can leave the suits in spirit form, otherwise it will seem strange when they can suddenly appear as children spirits and attack the purple guy (Ending of fnaf 3). You decide which ending it is :) Frankly I'm rooting for the good ending, the souls finally getting rest after Vincent dies.

Bonnie? Oh my GOD BONNIE!

The fight scenes were pretty good and detailed.

Good chapter. Thumbs up.

This is just the first chapter and i can already see some mistakes. There are alot of misplaced dependent clauses, the way the characters dialogue is expressed seems very out of place, there are grammar mistakes everywhere, some spelling here and there, some things don't make sense since no context was given to them,and it feels rushed and poorly written. The first two sentences just...ugh. Please take English, you severely need it.
Also some of the story elements as mentioned before hold no base and need some sort of context you do not provide,and the whole thing seems too fast.
2/10 for trying

Lie, Die, Repeat... hmmm, at least that's what I could see...

Great chapter, simply amazing.