This was so cute! I love the idea of Star having to face real life consequences like this, especially when it comes to the people she cares about. It was awfully cheesy the way Marco was comforting Star haha but also very sweet. I really liked your fic! Thank you for sharing it with us

YASSS omg star’s reactions are so cute haha

This is pretty good. The characters are pretty in character and the scenes are pretty vivid.

If I should offer any criticism, it will be threefold.

First, lose the "GENERAL POINT OF VIEW". You should never need to tell the reader what the point of view is and you don't. That kind of all caps "point of view"-message is usually a sign of a bad fic. Since your shot here isn't bad, don't scare viewers away from a lovely little story by having such an amateur sign at the top of a pretty good piece of writing.

Second, I think giving the exact time Marco is fighting is kinda weird. I haven't got a suggestion for doing it differently, but a vaguer message of time would be nice.

Third: I might be wrong, but doesn't Ludo usually call Star by her full name or title?

Now, though the review looks mostly like criticism, everything I didn't mention is pretty good. So well done.

Happy writing.

AWWWWWWWW! I know Marco goes through a lot but sometimes I wish something like this would happen. Why you ask? Because STARCO! Adorable fanfic 3 Keep writing!

Awwwwww! So cute!

Awww, it may not have been full out shipping there, but I like it. :D

Aw that's so sweet

That was so damn cute

THIS WAS SO CUTE!

That was so ADORABLE! And to be honest,Star is extremely lucky to have Marco with her. He has awesome human powers no one can have

Awesome:)

I agree with you...this show is absolutely, positively aDORKable! XD

*cough* I suck *cough* comedy low *cough* bye.

*cough* #StarcoForLife

That was an amazing one shot your writing is very detailed & enthralling would love to see it continued someday or similar if you decide to someday.

Awesome.
I love starco.

Don't stop wrighting now.