ohhhh god!its just a lemon full of passion!write more of this passion sex between naruhina.i love it!very great m rated story!

...Holy fuck... That, was absolutely fucking amazing... Almost like an orgasm on the eyes to be able to read that... Excellently constructed and delivered, oh my, that was exquisite... I honestly don't think I've read something this well written in years... At times, it can be a little, just a hair, over the top, but it's absolutely amazing overall... Hot damn, I'm glad I found this... Amazing job... Wow...

Haha. Wowwee! This is my first time reading a Naruto/Hinata fic.

You know, I don't even watch Naruto or read it. I just know from memes and infos from magazines or sites here and there that Hinata loves Naruto and that he didn't know and doesn't feel the same. I've known about that for a while now even though I don't follow the series and that was enough for me to ship these two!

I love this! Great job!

beautiful

Surprised this one-shot didn't get more attention considering how well-written it is along with the canon-high.

Only real problem I have with it are some of the adjectives used to describe Hinata. Willowy is used for tall, lithe women. Hinata is more of a short-stack.

Other than that, great one-shot. I find lemons are better when there is some emotional weight behind them, and you conveyed that well.

I love this. I Love Naruhina, I don't read a lot of fanfictions about them but I've been cheering Naruhina from the start. And this one shot toke my breath away though I think It was too quick for them to have an intimate relationship since they haven't even go through the basics yet. But they had known each other for a long time I guess that counts and It's not just a one night thing they love each other.

Soon after he too will realise his feelings for her even if it almost cost him her. They'll get married and have two kids because they're FREAKING canon! *confetti falls down from the sky*

This was great, really! beautiful way of writing!

waaaaaaaa... love it! i want sequeel

Woooooow, that was amazing! AND you really expanded my vocabulary! I looked up 5 words easy, maybe more. But actually, I don't think your use of purple prose was gratuitous at all, it really enhanced the significance of the moment and the poetry of how it all felt to Hinata, it was really so lovely. And I really liked how you had this steady stream of sophisticated language effortlessly flowing around and mingling with the kind of adorkably awkward phrase oh Hinata's "haywire-going emotions," the juxtaposition brought more of a sense of reality to it for me somehow...

But also, would you really say Hinata's figure is willowy? Isn't that how you describe a tall, thin girl? I don't know, a minor detail, perhaps. Also, I caught a typo for you (in caps) "and instinctual, welcoming gesture for his HIM to stem his knee there"

Hehe, in a way it's a bit cheeky of Naruto to figure out Hinata likes him by allowing her to cook dinner for him and then wordlessly jumping her bones. But yeah, typical men. He's just lucky it worked! Ooh, can someone write an alternate version where he starts taking her clothes off and she flips out because they've never even held hands before? Hehe. Not it!

Fantastic story, just... You have Naruko labeled instead of Naruto... Just lettin ya know.