Reviews for Starstruck |
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AnonBoredLord chapter 1 . 8/9/2018 Quite rushed but definitely hoping to see more like this |
kaylakaze chapter 1 . 9/21/2016 It almost felt like there was a word quota: "We've only got 200 more words to wrap this up, so Ruby tell Weiss you love her and Weiss, ask her to bed." Much could have been done such Weiss telling Ruby that she was having a lot of fun and would be in town and if Ruby would come hang out. Then, in a few days it could escalate, Weiss telling Ruby about the benefits and difficulties of her position, thus humanizing her more and getting the two closer, and Weiss deciding to stay in Vale longer to be with Ruby. |
Guest chapter 1 . 7/7/2015 Awe this was great! Lil rushed in the end but still great! |
Master Kosa chapter 1 . 3/3/2015 Good story, I was wondering when someone would write this certain plotline. Only the last third was IMHO too fast and unbelievable, thanks to these points: Weiss telling Ruby that she loves her too and especially her comment about her bed being too big for one person. Those elements are too OOC and out of place, IMHO lowering value of the whole fic. Without these sentences it would be excellent, this way it's just very good. |
suomynonAX chapter 1 . 3/3/2015 Well that escalated quickly... in the best way possible! |
spammer263 chapter 1 . 3/3/2015 Looks good so far how long do you plan on making this |