ok, i admit, i found it hilarious when hide almost got a bar of soap stuck in his ass lol

if i were you i wouldve added more story thus, making suspension and it not being so short and cutting to the sex scene ( but, this is also my opinion. i think your story is great but I just think a little more would make it a little better )

p.s : still love the story lmao

amazing

I absolutely love this! Need a new chapter!

LOL okay so that was sweet but I like how the end was just the famous “let’s go home.” Like it was a sweet short story and I absolutely adored it! Took me like 10 minutes to read. I kinda want an epilogue or something like that. Overall, yeah, your grammar needs improvement. . But story is pretty good. Made my yaoi infused heart swell. ;-; (please make an epilogue, I for one will read it)

hey im seeing that it bothers a lot of you my grammar mistakes and stuff... i didnt write this on Microsoft word or anything i literally did this on a note pad so it was really hard to proofread

mikaela hyakuya i cant reply to you cause you did it anonymously if you see this please make an account also i had to log out to post this cause it says i already commented on this chapter as myself T_T

omgggggggggggggg yasssssssssss 100% great

You don't put soap up someone's ass I don't think that's right

omg pls make more

hi! it's me again. I just wanted to say that I think this was completely amazing and I would very happy if you could add continuation to this very wonderful fanfiction. please don't think badly, or strangely of me but I think you are very good at writing this kind of topic and I would be will to help out with editing and possibly even illustration for the continuation of these chapters. I have been working in writing and illustration for most of my life and I believe that we would make a magnificent team. if there is any way for you to reply to me,

I loved this chapter. I was very intense. I'm not sure whether you count this as negative or positive criticism but you typed Kaneki feel good causing him moaned. it bothered me so I am correcting it here. it should be, Kaneki feel good causing him to moan. other than that slight grammar error I love this and think that you should continue with this kind of content.

hide smiled as he gently pecked kaneki's lips.
"kaneki...lets go home"

my reaction: FUUUUUUUUUUCCCCCKKKKKKK Y U DO THIS THATS WHAT HE SAID THEN HE KINDA DIED
(P.S. i said kinda died bucuse he is only dead in the anime in manga he is dosent die. buz gods already dead )

(P.P.S. FUCK YOU GOD AINT REAL BITCHES)

'kaneki lets go home'

*deep breath'
Y U DO THIS Y

also hide only died in the anime he is alive in the manga lol rip all the anime watcher

dont