kronos is spelled kronos

Germs really, he's been starved and he worries about germs.

You really haven't showed Percy being heroic or tough in the slightest up tip this point, sure there was done parts where you described him as such but not showed. Add on top of how he is being so pitiful while being tortured after only a few hours it's not really shining a good light on Percy, like all he had supposedly accomplished es based on luck. Also you made a point to point out Percy's affinity for magic but he hasn't used it away all.

There also appear to be a lot of words missing.

This chapter had done exceptionally bad grammar in it. Makes it really hard to read.

They watched him get the cat, shy would they ask him.

Your explanations a bit muddled. In the future read if our loud or something, Judy cause it makes sense in your head doesn't mean it does anywhere else.

Annabeth and Percy's interactions here make more sense.

Um, I think you mixed up their roles. He is the loner and she was trying to befriend him. So why are all the interactions and reactions reversed, she should be asking him to be friends and he should be the disbelieving one.

Wouldn't they have figured it out from hearing him vouch for them? I mean he gave his full name and is a grandson of Poseidon, which they know, at the very least it shouldn't be too big a surprise.

Grammar, it is your weakness, it it.

For like half the chapter you spellt Iapetus wrong, infact you spelt it Lapetus

I'm sad it's over. Is your new book a sequel to this one?

Wow, you and I have a lot in common...

Cool so far. When's the next up date? Happy New Years.
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