I looooove thiiiiiis! Future Gohan as a main character! Yamcha not getting Yamcha’d! Villains being more relevant! The slice of life parts and the action are really well done, and I can’t wait for the next chapter. Take you time, relax, and don’t stress bout this. Take care, and keep being awesome.

I actually just found this one yesterday and I like the idea of it. I have been kicking around an idea for a Gohan-centric 'fic myself lately, and I gotta say this is an intriguing "what if" scenario.

Giving some of the humans some more footing to stand and fight on was great, and I'm super curious to see where this goes. I hope that you do continue with it. *thumbs up*

man this is chinese, i can bet. those fucking weird names and language, yes 100 % chinese shit

When I saw that this was updated i had to look twice because it’s been awhile! I loved the chapter and wtf is this beast thing! Anyways hope you update more after this, I’ll be here to read it!

ok that power level alone is BS a ssj transformation multiplier is x50 so it should be 500,000,000

Honestly what is the point of Future Gohan. He literally just came back to the past to get his ass kicked by someone who trunks beat without breaking a sweat and had to be saved by his dad. Why? Why write this?

Actually a senzu can heal a hole in the chest since goku was shot through the chest by piccolo in dragon ball. Also afterwards goku ate a senzu and was fully healed.

Complicated. Fun read though.

Hi. Thank you so much for such a wonderful story. You write beautifully and your descriptions are enthralling. Your time lines are very intriguing and I like the bit of brain twisting it causes. I can't wait to see what happens next with the androids and the Z gang. You have at least one person still waiting in anticipation for the next chapters.

Interesting chapter and plot idea

I really enjoyed this reading this story. It's actually one of the better time travel stories I've read in a long while. I'm really glad that I caught it.

I have to say that this entire plot is well thought out and very interesting. I was drawn in from the first line and didn't stop reading. How you incorporate every part of your story is pure genius. There wasn't a single moment while I was reading that I thought that things felt forced, or out of place. Kudos on that. That's awefully hard to do.

Overall, I'm impressed with your work towards this story. From the length of the chapters, the content, to the timeline of it all. All of it is very impressive.

I can't wait to read the next chapter (which I notice is already late. Lol. ;)

From your loyal reader.

This chapter was outstanding. In terms of laying the foundation and world building. This was so well done. Its exposition done right. This chapter was at first really hard to follow, so I actually opened up a word document and made notes as I read! Haha!

The warning signs were going off for me with your chapter title. That was backed up, when immediately jump into Trunks perspective. At first I thought he was from the original timeline - as in the canon series timeline. But then he mentions Gohan went back in time, and well my smile couldn't be contained.

You did it, you teased it in our correspondence, but you actually did it, trunks is coming back too!

Earlier in the chapter I wasn't sure why Gohan went back, had he already defeated the androids, and then decided to go get the dragon balls? maybe to fix what is sure to be a desolated world.

Once you brought in Cell, I started to get a better understanding of what was happening. Cell appeared around the time he did in canon, but with his journey to the past, Gohan was the one who caught the virus and like Goku, despite his most valiant effort, beaten.

Your exploration of the mechanics of time travel were really well done, but for a while, I couldn't figure out the differences between timelines; a, b, c and d. And then it hit me, with the placement of this chapter, and last chapters cliffhanger. We are now at the moment which defined the outcome of the journeys Gohan took from timeline A and C respectively.

I understand that Cell had no option but to go further back in time than his confrontation with Gohan in timline B, thus creating a new timeline D - the timeline that our Gohan/shourai is now in. But how can Trunks follow him? That's one thing I cant get my head around.

The ending of the chapter was really nice pay off, figures that there would still be one android left standing.

Few points I want to touch one -
Trunks considers Cell to be a aberration caused by Gohan? (Also have you been watching Legends of Tomorrow? If not, you should, great show)
And that bombshell you dropped in regards to the timeline A Gohan's fate - Oh my god, that is quite dark.
New Namek was destroyed? Is this another hint at the potential space arc you have planned?

In conclusion, this was one of my favourite chapters. You're really setting up a fantastic story here. Your Trunks is written really well, his obsession and guilt make him really interesting, and I cant wait to see where this all goes from here.

Looking forward to the next chapter!

Really good opening chapter for this arc! The story is moving along well.

I loved that fact that Shourai has taken control of Gohans training. How many people would love the opportunity to go back and talk some sense into their younger selves? Shourai makes the most of the opportunity by trying to get the kid to develop and actual interest in the intricacies of ki manipulation.

One thing that struck me was that Shourai referred to the Androids as "Cyborgs". We of course find out later, that they were originally human and were turned into cyborgs. As a result, they weren't true synthetic androids like 16. Does Shourai already know this? If so, how? Maybe in the midst of beatdown in the past, 17/18 decided to monologue and spilled the beans?

"attributed to some battle off in the depths of space" - What?! - What are you setting up here? (I love me some epic space battles) - Or is this simply Vegeta cleaning up the remains of Frieza's army?

I had wondered why you had kept around the namekians, and boy did it pay off big time. He did it, He actually did it. It always makes me shake my head in disappointment, Bulma, the smartest member of the group, even suggests they ask Shenron where Gero is holed up. But no, "noble kakarot" has other ideas. I'm so glad Shourai is doing his best to take advantage of every opportunity the past has to offer him.

I like that the gang end up searching for the lab on foot, I feel as though it kind of grounds the search a bit.

Android 15 is the wildcard here, female, I'm guessing a "real" android, and has the absorbing nodes in "her" hands like 19/20.

I like that Tien is starting to realise that he may have made a mistake in deciding to train alone, for so long he was the strongest human, and now frickin Yamcha of all people has over taken him. I'm sure this will lead to some good character arcs for him.

TCHK?! What kind of creature makes that noise?! Brilliant cliffhanger, can't wait to read what happens next.

Love your story and I can't wait to read more! Please don't stop writing!

ohhh the suspense! excited to read more, and I really enjoyed reading about Shourai's and Gohan's relationship, muy intersante!