English is not my native lenguage, so i'm not very good in grammar, but i can tell you that, when writing a fast pacing action scene you don't need to be very detailed.

Ex.
Just when he was about to strike him, chrom made a swift sidestep to the left, just barely nicking his side.
Just when he was about to strike him, chrom made a swift sidestep, barely nicking his side.

The action is still the same, he evade the strike, but it does not distract you from the main point that they are fighting, leave the gaps in an action scene be filled by your readers imagination.

A shame to see that this story is cancelled but I can understand what you mean when you say that you want to create a more original story in the future.

I wish you the best of luck and I'll make sure to check out any other Fire Emblem Awakening stories you create in the future if you choose to stay in the fandom.

It's been a wild ride

Well at least the moment we were all waiting for has finally happened o ! Honestly it had me worried for a minute when Grima (I suppose it's him talking in Robin's mind) supposedly managed to stop Robin from confessing and I guess it added a little something to the original confession :) !

That said yeah I could feel that this chapter was probably going to be the last one. Maybe it was the lenght or the way it felt rushed. Well it wasn't that rushed actually (25 chapters is a lot after all) but I honestly believed that even though they would admit they loved each other they would confess after the end of Walhart or sth ".

Anyway it was still good and I understand that you wanted to leave this fanfic on a good note :) ! I think I kinda understand the way you feel. Personnaly when it comes to my Pokemon fanfic, even though I don't want to copy others' work (well aside from Satoshi Taijiri, Gamefreak etc... it's a fanfic after all) I still feel like it's difficult to have my own identity :x.
It's not like I was taking ideas from other fanfic writers (I hope at least). On the contrary I actually grew tired of a certain trend focused on the character of Ash and thus I wanted to make a fanfic which would change a bit from the usual "Better" Ash "genre" (I don't know how making a Gary Stu out of Ash and making him ultra OOC is making him better... And people do mostly that kind of annoying fanfic).
Anyway back to the subject I don't think I got my ideas thanks to other fanfic writers... Once again I hope not. However it's actually hard not to at least take a lot of inspiration not from other stories (films, mangas etc..)... Since, I don't have a lot of time to write anyway it's not too much of a problem but still it's kinda annoying to constantly be careful not to "copy" too much ".

In any case I really enjoyed reading your fanfics and whether you'll come back or not I thank you for your efforts and I really hope you'll be fine whatever you do in your life :D ! Bye bye and keep being cool w !

You could just post what you had planned and tie loose ends that way lol

I got the feeling something was off when i saw the amount of words, but i ll get to that later

I loved both Sumia and Virion insight, telling them about ther respective experiences

As for the confession, it was a nice touch adding thw voice and seeing it defeated made me laugh, as for our lovebirds; after all the waiting, and it was worth it

On to a more serious note, regarding you cancelling this story; I would say that you are being too hard on yourself, except that i know exactly how you feel, and i totally understand wanting to gwt more time to figure out your life

I am sad that the fic ends here, but i will alwaya cherish the memories, who knows ? I might try to continue it, with your permission

And dont just dissapear, let's talk to each other whenever you want, and if you do make another accoubt, i hope you let me know

I am really happy that i met you and that we are friends

Happy 2020

Christ, it's been over a year since we last heard of you, a lot's happened. Three Houses finally came out and it's beautiful, I finally wrote my own Fanfict about Fates with Robin in it. It's nice to hear from you but so sad that you're done but that's alright. Life comes first even it bites at you at times. Good luck.

It is a shame that you won't be finishing this but you do you. Writing is hard and if you are not pleased about your work you shouldn't force it just to please internet randoms. I think a little explanation like this one is the way to go.

Take your time to think about what you wanna do in your future and I wish you the best.

PS: The Ylissean and the Plegian was hella fun :D

Bubby you better continue this or I'm going to have a heart attack I don't want this to die like a game that had bad reviews I want it to be the attaintion of the year is all most 2020 and you haven't continue it so plz continue this I would like to see them get together plz.

Aw come on, buddy. You can't just leave that story unsettled. We still need you to finish it up, and everyone's still cheering you up. And about chapter 25, we just wanted to look at it as soon as possible.. Cmon, buddy, don't let this incredible fanfiction die.

For the gods, really liked, this is just, I'm excited to see how this continues, Well done! and sure take your time, this is a hard job and you need to invest a lot of time in writing, rewriting, thinking in the story, I wish you all people who create such wonderful stories could get more of what you get, anyway very well written, see ya!

So, did the future Grima absorb priests to heal Robin? That's what I got from the story...

That suicide was rather vile, hardcore and an interesting take on Chon'sin due to it's Chinese inspiration and the common issue regarding how serious they are when it comes to honor and violent reactions to any form of dishonor but also the beauty of how they take their traditions to heart regardless of what outsiders may think. Overall, another fantastic chapter.

My only complaints is the absence of Tiki as she hasn't been around for three chapters now. I really feel like she should've been involved in the fight between Robin and Chrom and she'd be the most adamant on figuring out how is that Robin survived. Also the fact that you haven't written about everyone's reaction to Robin's possible demise or the fact that he's alright is rather disappointing.

Nooooooo! Chapter 25 come pleeeeaaasse! I've already had to cry enough from this and I love it!

Well well... I guess the only way to save robin was to make him a risen but with a sexier face and a brain X3 ! Not that I want to discriminate them but I'm not even sure risens have a tongue to make a good old french kiss or that they even want a partner in their life more than they want to slaughter people... That said I guess you can argue more with DLC maps' risens '.

Jokes aside you managed to find quite a good way to reveal to Say'ri her brother's true intentions without Excellus :). And also I like that the Resistance is not easily accepted as allies than in the game.

Poor Say'ri though... it seems like she puts more and more distance between Yllisseans (main characters included) and her. Well considering (most) Yllisseans don't understand her culture and rituals, that she wasn't the one to finish her brother and more importantly (well your chapter made it seemed like it was the most important reason) that she can't be with Robin as a lover... no wonder why I guess -v-. Plus I can safely ASSUME that she watched Lucina sleeping in Robin's tent and that she "hates" mostly because she think Robin will choose Lucina over her right ' ?

I'm eager to see why I should be ready for the next chapter whatever it is because the it's time for Robin to truly die or to confess his love (or both at the same time) ! Whatever it is I know it will be memorable o !

Hope you had a merry Christmas :) ! See you next time !