I'm a few chapters in so far and this is honestly one of the best pieces I've ever read. It's better than a few published works out there and if you're like me and picky about proper spelling and grammar, you will definitely be happy.

Story/plot 10
Grammar/punctuation/spelling 10
Smoothness and flow 8
Fluff and repetition 6

A few places where the paragraph might be a little redundant but compared to the rest of the good stuff 10/10 would recommend reading.

Keep up the great work !

You did such a great job on the reading and also with the song. I teared up!

good story

LP

Girl your ability to describe detail by detail of every twisted of the plot is amazing. I love how you explain the depth of the different psychological profiles, the richness of the interaction between these and of course the sexy times.

Really girl. This is one of the best stories shakarian I ever read.

Pd: I am a spanish speaker, so... if something sound weird, have mercy with me.

I love Grunt! Krogan are so cute! They have little tails. Anything with tail can not be fucking cute!

Nice!

Javik x Liara! 3

That was tough. Great chapter!

I love the way you describe the Garrus's mother, and her relationship with Shepard.

Pd: When I finish this I'll go for "Delicate Subject".

Nice chapter. And please give us a love triangle with Thane. We deserve that!

The part of the mandible shard is fucking creepy! XD

I've absolutely loved thisit's great how you have added your own scenes in and it works. And the humour... It's had me in stitches.

Awww! Garrus is so sweet!

I like your style, the mix of your own and in-game situations. At first I needed to get used to your script-like dialogue and sometimes i would like an explanation about the feelings accompanying it. But it breaks up the flow of reading nicely.
Also I'm a fan of how Garrus develops his feelings and bond and how you manage to make the timeline of ME2 still plausible.