I liked the Epilogue!

Holy shit dude the dialogue is so forced.

The attempts at humor are pretty bad, it just comes across as lazy writing and feels really out of place. The dialogue doesn’t feel genuine either at times.

Never mind I misread

Was there a reason to kill Darelyn? She seemed like an interesting character.

what if the absolutely most depraved sexual indulgence is foot fetishes, and the eldar ended up having a huge orgy dedicated to foot fetishes and thats what spawned slaanesh

So is there a next arc? Amazing story btw.

So, finally here, I have to say, interesting read. Had a good time. Really liked the complete change of pase in this story, normally reading about happy heroes, to now a more somber down to earth story where the main character makes the best of his circumstances. Thanks for letting me know about this one!

Wow, great story so far. I love how the story is unfolding slowly, it makes it more interesting to find out what happens next. Plus, I a sucker for Female eldarxHuman male pairing.

haha good thing this heresy come to an end but I can't help feel sad too
oh no I became a HERETIC
shoots head with bolter

DELETE THIS HERESY and where the fuck is my property

This story has been a bit rough at places, and very heavy handed with a fetish. There were scenes that had a lot of potential but fell flat to "human savior" complex. You may write what you want, but keep in mind this is meant to be fanfiction of another author's universe. Any Eldar falling for a human needs a LOT more development for it to work. Also, less feet. Your magical realm is not for everyone.
Before anyone says "don't like, don't read," keep in mind this story was posted in a public environment, with the promise of reviews and reactions. It is not exempt from any commentary.

Honestly this whole fanfic started out with so much promise... then limped into stupidity and stayed there. I kept hoping it would get better but the last three chapters were utter stupidity.

Genial

Just re-read this story, and I have to say it is my favorite 40k fic hands down. It is very well written and really pulls you in. The twists and turns are great. The risks and danger in the story work very well and I am glad to see it is missing the sense of "Everything will work out perfectly/easy" that a lot of other stories seem to have. I was sad to see Darelyn go but I am glad that Felia made it with Levantia. Definitely a 9/10 in my opinion! I would love to see a sequel to this story, maybe with Levantia and Felia trying to resurrect Darelyn some how, or just a new adventure on their new ship with the White Hero. But no matter what it is definitely a great read.