The grammar and spelling need improvement. Overall, it seems like it was written by someone who still needs to fine tune their skills, but it is not without promise.

The first chapter lays it on a little thick. Never had a bath/brushing out years of knots? A little awkward, but most things are to begin with. The two brides competing thing does not paint Natsu in a good light though.

Amazing freaking story! The best Lemons ever in a story! Totally freaking loved it!

This was such a great story! It was along but like I said the descriptions were so in detailed that I was able to picture the whole story! The ups and downs everything I thought was written beautifully thank you for sharing!

I love the name! Yayyy

Omg are you serious how can he do this?! Is there no magic thing that can detect if she is telling the truth! Ugh I’m so mad

I was nervous about that oh boy I don’t think I’m ready for that

Sad*

Awww was but happy

Wow dragon moon was certainly something. Long but worth it the descriptions was amazing you did a great job! How dare they interrupt them lol

Thank you for this powerful story of my number one favorite anime and characters you did a great awesome job and it was straight and true I pray for the best for your family and you and I hope for the best for your life be the caliber of your soul and bear the emblem that others will know what you stand for

...PLEASE! DO ANOTHER/MORE NALU STORIES!

If you're taking any requests/suggestions, I got an idea for a Nalu story (along with some Gajeevy):

All the Male Dragon Slayers are going through heat (Dragon Mating Season) and want to claim their mates. However, the Alpha of the group has to start it off before the others could (That being Laxus; the Dragon Slayers formed a pact with each other, becoming a family group of their own [Wendy is their baby/little sister, but is too young for Mating Season]). He starts off by scent-marking his mate (...Honestly, I think Laxus and Mira make a cute couple), before taking her to his den to mate, while releasing a pheromone that the other males pick up and go in search for their mates (They find it to be the appropriate time to finally claim their mates, along with starting a family [They want to become fathers and desire to have their mates pregnant with their babies/hatchlings.]).

While the females, though not Dragon Slayers, will be effected by their mates' pheromones (lightheadedness, fever-like symptoms), which is suppose to help their bodies relax and increase the chance at getting pregnant. So, the Male Dragon Slayers will keep mating/rutting with their mates, until they end up pregnant... And yes, the Male Dragon Slayers have knots.

Wait a minute...Is that even possible?

I have completed the first chapter. The lack of periods so far is a bit jarring. The way we are just told things instead of being able to read it through the characters actions and words is new to me but I guess everyone’s narrative is different. The greatest shock is the difference in everyone’s personalities. Natsu demanding and fearing? Lucy shy and obedient? It took some time getting used too. However I was inspired by the idea of Natsu being king. I might develop a fan fiction based of that idea. Hats off to you author.

Awesome... This fanfiction has everything I was searching for, I'm so sad that it ended and wanna hear more about this fanfic... More ;(