it seems this fanfic is written by some retarded targaryen fanboy but nothings gonna fucking make sense you make aegon a retarded character just like you are a retarded writer.

Interesting idea and plot and chapter

Update more chapters about this story,because it's the best,extra and the great story that I was reading about it,and I am also starting to love and to like reading to this story. So can you please write more chapters,because I want to know what happens in the next chapters about it. THANKS SO MUCH FOR WRITTEN TO THIS STORY,thanks so much about it.&&&£££%%%$$$

Good except of fight scenes which were to repetitive, I read almost same scene where character cuts and slashes with sword until he knows no more like ten times in this story.

I have to say, it's quite disappointing how you've turned Jon in to such a butt-hurt little bitch. I hope this childish attitude doesn't remain, that would ruin this story. He is completely incapable of seeing anything from anyone's point of view but his own and his sense of entitlement is making him into an ungrateful, selfish brat.

I find it very unrealistic that anyone would ever trust Walder Frey with such an important secret !

Hey liked the story in curious tho r u planning a sequel

Not too bad of an ending though it feels a bit rushed here but you do close everything up quite well. I have enjoyed reading and now on to your next work.

So is he dead or just lost at sea. I think the Ironborn are going to cause troubles and between Balon and Euron it will be a thorn in the side of not only the North but the realm.

The North is making their presence felt and Ned is showing his worth to Aegon. I think with the decimation of the Westerlands army that it will bolster the armies of the Dragons. But have to wonder about the betrayal plot that Tywin was attempting to put in place.

That was an interesting meeting between Jon and Dany. The fact that she stirs something in him that he did not expect speaks to some interesting further chapters. The way Dany was towards him is expected since she would be untrusting of him until she gets to know him better. That she questions his parentage is also expected but I think with time she will realize that Jon is who he says he is and that her other nephew and niece are alive and well as well.

Why did u kill off oberyn why

The North arrives and Winter has come. That Oberyn has fallen will be a blow to Aegon and his army but it will also give him a drive to punish the Lannisters for what they have taken from him and threaten to do so in the future.

Oh no! Edmure!
You kill so many characters in your stories! You've got nothing to envy GRRM! Your stories are very unpredictable. I start reading a chapter and I don't know till the end if they will make it or not ... You're evil! (in a good way)

Ah so the murmurs Dragon I making an appearance. I think that will make things interesting if that is so or are they backing Viserys? Could this be Dany coming to Westeros? Also I think Jon handled that well. Don't let them bully him and stick by his decisions.

Good chapter.