When I started rereading this, I noticed the mistake with the time dilation. You said in the previous chapter that a thousand years in Equestria was 20 years in the Elemental Nations. How long would a week be for Naruto to visit. This doesn't make sense.

when Naruto ask storm had move on with his army job both night and days he had move up the racks to 2 LT and when he be doing it his belt backer had the sun and moon into it now , when working his be living in odd homes like a hut like house and when he get to pony town Naruto had keep a house on the top floor when into it Naruto had find a 2 unit and he moving into it now , let rainbow dash and her old class met and finder living in the old one , when he in the other one , when twight and apple jack find out about it ,when seeing his 2 house is get a bed room in the back and a 2 bed room too , when he paly fell out game and some time he had game troy and arm band for it with his top rack and game name too, when the money form it help out too , he and spike had living in his home too, paly games and workings too muslces on spike get big now, and storm too , when spike had keep the house clan now,

MS i Robert Krause was trying to showing like life if Naruto and rainbow dash had get marring to each other and used the way of his old ninjas vaillge had let a boy marring more then 3 or 5 wife s to help him to get his clan back up like rain bow dash twight sparker and apple jack and then Trixie , when in others fan fiction stuff i be seeing with was cool and it is was sill is to me , so why not here with Naruto and my little pony , it is not spam you but help out for Naruto and rainbow dash to had a king mon of them own too when she is running her own flying unit , and queen of it , when Naruto is king and running his own stuff too, as for twight and Trixie is here too , when applejack is Naruto 6 wife and she had running a shop in town with apple boomer ,when spike and his wife living in the same lands too , , as for why is Naruto own unit is i think of sky like ships flying about and his own ship is name of #7 his old ninjas tame it is pic siting no his desk , in the ship is flying and help out too,

when Naruto or storm had made some new lands when he rainbow dash and twight had made into the kingmone dawn fire and when rainbow dash is co ruler and co founder of it , founder of rain bow dash non flying , rack of gen 4 stars , when twight is co ruler and co founder of dawn and founder of a school of mic , head misters , rank head mister , queen as rainbow dash is , when storm is founder and co ruler , king now , founder and head of rouge DM , rank cap , spike is marring to rally and living now , knight cap , when the house of storm is the power in it now , when the bedrooms is super size big for 3 , storm doing keep a little cub size bed room in the big one men cave office it 1 now it is his own bed room , when on the wall is old ninjas stuff like a map and abut black ops mask on the wall , when he keeping some art of big bods grils and woman like on the wall now , Naruto had keeping pics of him and rainbow dash it some nights clubs in LAS Pesis when Naruto win some money of bits 2000-9032 bits he had used it to made the dawn kingmond when them living in now , when twight and rainbow dash had running them own stuff now , Naruto and spike had rouge d, doing the under earths stuff like move guns and others stuff too, when the lands was made others parts came up like the infomces lands of the lords like the DJpony and zone and sweet dopes and her lover Lunt and the mory is Trixie own dad , when Naruto had not full like it , he and spike had made rouge as it was need too Naruto and spike had tommy guns 2 twins and some side arms too, Naruto was not in the move for the most guns for hire cos , when in then before he marring the 2 grils he was it sweet dos night cub it time bund out and living up floor too a office Naruto had keep was used as a way of get the fox out of him , when it was fin doing it , fox was out now , but he had to living here now , when Naruto had tell the fox it and the red lights is like the one back home only he to living here in this office for good , why Naruto it is not cool boy , not my pomerd fur ball , and then is a back bed room , for you to used and the glass on the outside is to keep you in , fox , when get out Naruto pay for it now used the money form a old job and now his own now , when get to the ship now , when the fox find food and others stiff when it ok , men he good it now,

when storm had get his bed room back into the way he had it , as for get the rack of Sage now , storm be to a bar he looking it when siting in it he put the pic of the 3 HOKAGE and his own into it now and saying good bay old men the barer ask him who the old men storm ho the 3 HOKAGE a old finder and my old ninjas boss i had looking up to and had a wars with , now he going out now , when get a beer now and saying to him good bay old men here to you sir , think you for let me be a ninja for when , then was home now before going back home he pay for the beer now the was home now , when the barter had think seeing some pony s who put pics on the wall before for a long time even cops doing it now, now a Prince and it is some old men 3 HOKAGE is new , when unkown to storm the barter was the 3 HOKAGE only thing is his now the barter now think of the 2 had wars with each others before , when the 2 storm had on the wall is the 3 and his 3 stunders and 3 sages , when Naruto or storm get it , back before going to living with his mother and aunt Naruto find it in a box form the 5 HOKAGE and ask him one day put on a wall when you get up there it is of her and the 3 and 2 boys in it , when doing it both her and Naruto put on the wall now, PS MS i Robert Krause saw it doing before when cops get kill off when them get took out when doing them job and on the TV show NICS when Gibbs had a pic of a felling ex FIB tune NICS men get kill off , it is not samp you , as for the pics is of ninjas Tame of when 3 HOKAGE was young and her had his ninjas tame the 3 sages , when the 3 was kids , and Naruto had one of the same old men who was like his grand father to him,

before get back home storm had be to the stop when you get some wonder bots stuff he buy some t shirt and jack for his own used , when some pins he get too for his base ball cap , back home , some others stuff he get is pans for twight , and note book , for rainbow dash is the same thing , and apple jack a new cow boy hat only it is blue and gold and pins too , when shy get a jacket and t shirt and some art books too, MS pie get some old pie dash and some book too, when get back to the old house he find in a cave he buy out used his old earth money like mob money he get the house cave now , a rich red and black and red and white too , and bed too, sleeping now , when pack his stuff now and think the cave was more quit for his own now, when made a map now and name it Fire storm and son now , his time here was more good too, PS MS i Robert Krause had get the cave out of the move with JIM Carry move when he paly the bad guy in it , as for some others things you find i was trying to help out why if Naruto or Storm had get his hands on the mob money form his old life earth and took it with him was used to buy out the cave house and was used it as his own whirlpool cony housed home , this not samping you Robert Krause

when in some time storm and shy had get to doing some time no the road and be staying in a RV storm had find his old men fire storm had owner ship of back when his mom and dad used keeping it before storm was born , even when he was ,storm was one workings with some bat pony name night wing and he tell the Prince about when the 2 had took time no the mass hill , when night wing he had get a note form his former cap and when reading it saying the RV is to be storms when get little big now his is now for it now , when looking it he get new red and gold on it now and some woods and others stuff on it now , when he was get on the road he think of took rainbow dash with him for when ,but she not going for workings now , when shy was going now , when now the had some good times too , when think of let rainbow dash and her former room met keeping the AP now and he can living in the RV now , when Luna had find out about this she was mad it 1 about and now she was think of it now ho fire storm you son get the old RV now the same one we had back them ,

when it the time storm had be ask by Shining and his wife Cadence to came to working the crysalys as he was doing it now , he had living in some old house with some others men one was 2 Lt Leroy Robertson and Sage bill ford a bat pony , the 2 be Storms room mates for when , when then Storm had find Sombra old used office and was looking it now think of took pics of it now and tell twight when you get to be a ruler twight you need a office like this one i storm had find form it like king Sombra had used as his own hide out form the days when he rule it , old books and art of himslfe talk of big super size ego twight , seeing old army ranks to some others stuff here too, as before Shining and his wife cadence find out about this room i when gave you a heads up lover , storm , when he be end it and sand it way to twight now , when get out he talk to shining about it when in a meeting with him about it as cadence had ask him to go back with her and the 3 had find when storm had find it now, when seeing Sombra office like he had it now , no way of a mad men like him running this kingmon like he doing it now, sir only time be here by them now , keeping now, when Naruto had sand his mom Sombra old book on his time it the school he sill had a thing for her , when she get now,

sir i Robert Krause had ask when storm had get his job with the army with it doing why kind of amor do he get i was think of mix it like gold sun and blue one like the bat pony s had to put on , when his time in the army he get 12 to 40 a army stuff like robbins and his racks too , why not do a Sage like one with him and his army jacket is green and brown and his units is both his mom and aunt units , on it too , when doing some workings Naruto had get the mob money and used it to buy and made a new home for him and rain bow dash to living in , as well Trixie and twight and spike too,

why not made rainbow dash do a red and blue dress and some long red rube cap for her to have as well is good to seeing her in and storm is in his hulk bulk aromer and his long black cape too with the sun and moon into it now, when his belt had the sun and moon into it too , as when rain bow dash and her old school room met back for when , when storm had to find a other part of his home is it a fell out pot house is in he buy out and his move into it now , when unpack his stuff form old army stuff his get into old glass cases of 23 time over 2 battle units pats now when the back bed room had a big super size bed in now and a army green bag too , when on the wall is art of hot big bobs grils he had get and woman too, when on the wall now , when his desk had 12 army year books and some odd frmly pics too. when on the bed is green black bed balke now,

MS the name is Robert Krause i was trying to show a life when Naruto ask Prince of storms had get his life it now and be marring to his lover Rainbow dash as his queen co ruler of a new home lands when she is head of her own air team and Naruto is head of a army unit and co ruler with her , and i was trying to help out with it , and some think a game name 2 life come in so show some think of it now is cool when fans of My little pony used the lands 2 life had used with , and some with Naruto own ninjas life too,

ok MS i Robert Krause was trying to help out with Naruto the Prince of storms and showing why kind of pony his is and 2 had to marring twight and Trixie was cool too, when rainbow dash is wife #3 and queen with him and co rule with him and she is the head of her flying team with storm had his too , i was think of some stuff out of 2 life a games life game when Naruto had a clan lands when the clan he had made with his wife and others too, sorry if it was pain to read on , i Robert Krause am a fan of both Naruto and my little pony , 4 i was mad about the ninjas vaillge in Naruto not let him go up in the ranks of his ninjas vaillge like the others had doing it , like ion and others too had be doing it , it made me mad about it ,

will naruto befriend queen crysalys I mean with his (old)world's brothels he can suggest they feed from there as lust is not that different from love as they go hand in hand. and he knows the fear of something out of his control.

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Not a single character displays even a bit of common sense here. Not one, it's terrible.