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fair enough you do what you need to do

This is truly interesting to read; please update very soon

I wonder if Yuya or Yu will tell the group the whole truth of the future and who he is?

Its great to see you again.

not bad

Love ur story, I was wondering r u going to update soon?

I am curious about what Ryouma going to do Yu's presence. Keep it up.

interesting

well i think hase should get an upgrade to shin, and mai having a genesis driver... which energy lockseed would she have or would it be a new one?

Do you think Yuya could save Lapis?

Okay... pacing is a bit better... but this did ruin some neat tension and drama that Gaim had in this episode. Bit of a complaint... is how you typed out "Strike In The Shadows" instead of "Isheigeki In The Shadows".

This isn't a bad chapter, but just try to stick to the original Japanese...

And about Hase getting the Kurokage-Shin stuff? ...NO! NO NO NO NO NO NO! Kurokage-Shin is a waste of space! All they did was attach a Genesis Driver onto a Kurokage suit.

Mai getting a Driver... do it! Do it! Do it do it!

Tee hee, loving Yu's character. YES! Make Mai a Rider! And give Hase Kurokage Shin, that'll stop him from going crazy and becoming an Inves. Well done!

Okay, not a bad chapter but, dear Sonic Booms, you are rushing Gaim's story... the discovery of the Overlords, the knowledge of there being other ways to save the world, you're going a bit quickly...

And Yu claiming he's the son of the golden fruit, while a good title drop, was very out of place... again, it's like last chapter where he claimed his Lockseed's rank. It just messes with the flow.

But, all in all, I do see your writing is improving, but I still think maybe having somebody pre-read or have a co-writer may help you in the long run.

Okay... where to begin? I think I'll start with the fact you came up with a good way to tell the kid from the future apart from present day Yuya, which you should have done from the get-go. Also... that whole part with Yu telling Kouta and Kaito he had an X Rank Lockseed, I feel is not needed.

But I do like how he talked with Mai from the future, being honest. But... I don't think Yu shoulda mentioned Ryouma's name where he did.

My advice: have somebody co-write this with you, so it'll flow a bit better.

Another, okay chapter. But I think Takatora being told to let Micchy have his space is a bit... uh... to much for him. Just letting him be warned about Ryouma, Sid, Minato and Touka all betraying him is enough.

Also, a big plot hold you left with Guardian's Lockseed... how is it the same Lockseed that was used in Gaim Gaiden, Kamen Rider Zangetsu and Gaim Gaiden, Kamen Rider Baron, when it was destroyed in the latter?

This was decent... but some pacing and explanations are sort of needed.