We have not seen you for four years...Will we ever get the end?

I really enjoyed this chapter. The last couple have, in my opinion been some of the best from this story. I hope you continue this one day!

Maturity borderline but still T in my opinion. If you want to develop past that then by all means please do!

Pacing is refreshing for me, but I love slow burners, especially when they are so well written! When a fict reaches a certain quality I stop trying to critique and just enjoy it lol. Maybe.. seaming the flashbacks into the chapters would be smoother, I like them though and I understand wanting to give content.

Very much love the story as is! Thanks for writing and putting so much work into it, I know it is an epic undertaking. #Following

More please! I love it!

Hey I noticed it’s a bit further out than you were expecting to get a rewrite/update so if you’re still working on it, sweet, but if not I super appreciate the story as written. It’s really intriguing and interesting and I really wanna see Jazz and Danny get to a place where they feel safe and by extension that each other are safe, so well done there.
If you are still working on this, I’d recommend cutting out the section where Vlad inner monogues about how Jazz wronged him. I think it gets implied well through their chat in Jazz’s apartment.
Also, cutting away to Bat’s observations on what he’s noticed/seen from tapes/visits to determine what he’s going to set up/future things that may happen with Danny/JL/YJ might be a good way to get the plot moving forward.
No pressure and wishing you the best with all the life stuff.

Lol Vlad thinks Millennials are rude—we’re just too busy and tired and see no point in putting up with BS manners and pretense so we tend to get straight to the point of things. “Rude” :’D

Great storry

updates please

This story is fantastic! It's a very tasteful rendition of the GIW-captures-Danny plot. Any grievance I had with this story was addressed in your last update; a bit drawn out, not really a crossover yet, etc. I just can't wait until you update!

Dude I love this! Can't wait to know more about Danny's past and for him to meet the team! Good luck with editing!

Thanks for the chapter and please keep up the good work (-)

i really like this story overall, and the pacing is not too bad. I look forward to seeing where this goes

Ok, don’t even know if you’ll see this but I just wanted to say that I loved this first chapter. It was one of the better writing pieces I’ve come across.

I just started reading this story. It has a lot of promise and is well written. The story actually has substance and character development which is rare in fabrication. I have to agree the pacing is a bit slow. I'm glad to here that you will continue this story even if the plot is changing. I think splitting up the dream sequences will help move the story along. Plus having so much of one dream sequence dedicated to torturing Danny although informative to the backstory and trauma he experienced will turn off some readers.

I like the slow pacing. But I'm weird.