O. M. G. What a chapter! Finally time eater reveal aahhhhhh soooo satisfying and finding out what they are, so in depth too ugh love it. I’m so sorry you received a negative review. This has been a freaking incredible fic and just such rich and amazing world building and the plot and writing and detail you’ve done is amazing. Fantastic work as always

Oh I forgot to mention(actually I am just trying to increase the review count since it's really underrated) that I would love those AU oneshots of time lord victorious

Please read my previous review first I reviewed it in the wrong order
Cons-
1 Your big reveal about her species came too late and would have been perfect a few chapters ago but by the time you revealed it you had already given most everything away with hints and the hype had died down
2 The TARDIS makes no sense while in start she was dead set on making may leave she is next second claiming the doctor would be distressed if she did? Shouldn't she have known that already? plus canon TARDIS already expressed emotions in episode "the doctor's wife" so I can't get onboard on the no emotions train even if it is a neat idea
3 stop it with the master slave thing it would have been okay once but since you did it with both the TARDIS and may it's getting really annoying
4 the fact may has hacked into doctor's timeline and molded herself according makes the doctor's emotions seem artificial and fake(I tend to avoid soulmates stories because of this reason)
5 yes the doctor POV's make him seem out of character but I adore them so much that I don't care about the characterization so please keep those up
Again all these are just my opinions and you don't have to take them seriously

Ok so I read it all and I am gonna do a pro and cons of this story because you asked us to be brutally honest but since you seem to take negative harshly just remember that these are just my personal opinions so if you agree with them work on it and if you don't ignore them
Pros-
1 Your hot scenes are fucking perfect(yes I am focusing on this first) because while during those scenes Linda was basically dying and the next(doctor/may) was one-sided and I still managed to see the potential so looking forward to an actual scene
2 Considering since most oc/doctor stories here are basically transcripts copies with a few added dialouges this story is above all of them by default
3 Your plot is amazing and unique
4 Your writing style is immersive and captivating

BROOOOOOO i just binge read this whole thing and im IN LOVE. the story? the time eaters? the absolute effort put into the chula backstories? brooooooo! and the doctor swore! the doctor never swears! it was so unexpected i laughed out loud. its like hearing your weird grandpa swear for the first time.
i LOVE may she's such like? a relatable gal? i mean besides the whole time eater thing but she's so easy to get behind. i'm really afraid for what happens if she meets the time lord victorious, though, ngl. i've only ever watched that episode once because it stressed ME out, and i was just sitting on the couch.
i can't wait to see what you do with this story!

Your writing is incredible! It draws me in and brings the story to life right in front of me! I feel so bad for May right now. She's going through so much! I love how the Doctor calls her Mayflower sometimes; it's adorable! I'm excited to read about her future run ins with other versions of the Doctor. And I'm so curious about their history, such as how the Doctor warms up to May. I really love how in the past Time Lords and Time Eaters were mortal enemies but the Doctor and May aren't and are traveling together. And why is the TARDIS being so cold? I'm really looking forward to what you're gonna do next!

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Don’t let anyone get to your head lovely. Trolling is indeed different from constructive criticism, and it is no doubt of mine whatsoever that you are an amazing writer. Hearing your description of what writing is to you just made my heart clench a bit. I don’t know what to say to make you believe me anymore but this story is so memorable and such a statement on originalitykeep your head up.

Oh boy!Time Lord Victorious is creepy as hell!he is gonna go batshit crazy and May isn't ready at all!QAQ
Thank you for the update~~ the shower sounds heavenly!i'm a sucker for a nice and relaxing hot bath!those giants baths a la rome always made me so jealous!thanks~~
One piece uh?always wanted to watch it but is really long~ if i got around to watch(or read) it i let you know how it was!
Scum villain is my fav chinese novel!is a bl of the author of modazoushi(Grandmaster of demonic cultivation or the live action The Untamed!)and well is bl and not usually my cup of tea but Shen Yuan(scum villain prota!)is hilarious!he is selfish and mean sometimes but i love him with all my black black heart!is like this: Shen Yuan cursed an webnovel author of an stallion novel about how the novel was trash!then he dies!and a system drop him in the novel(Proud Inmortal Demon Way)in the body of the scummiest master that abused the protagonist(Luo Binghe) and that end ups as a human stick!Blackened Binghe comes as a demon lord to get revenge and take his masters legs and arms(Human Stick!)...can you imagine the pressure?you can't mess with the overpowered protagonist!he is in the body of the scum villain that gets dismembered in the novel!he is ofcourse terrified af!and then goes and tries to change is fate with a cruel system that punish if he acts out of character!...ehem as you could probably have guessed i totally recomended it!and there are lots of fft works as well so i'm truly happy!hahaha it is chinese novel and dunno if you may have read some?the untamed is really popular and they are from the same author and i heard that other work is Heaven Official Blessing thats getting animated(i think?)haven't read it and dunno if i would read it cause angst..thank you for endure my ramblings!
Covid19 is awful and is fucking up all my country!thankfully our president is all about quarentine (heard that in others places the government is pushing to lift the quarentine even with the danger,yikes) but my husb and i are going out to work still cause money is tight(we are doing our utmost to be careful ofc)so i'm always scared to get sick!but gotta do what you have to...hope you are doing good!please take care and if you can stay home even better!if you can't be extra careful!love you~~ oh oh about thechap!it looks really interesting but i can smell the angst!this isn't gonna be nice it is?you are a cruel cruel lady did you know?~love you~~

I read the opening ANs. But I shan't protest should you decide to put a bunch of nonsense there. Twould be most funny. But what do you mean "May is a pitcher"? She plays baseball? She's a container with a spout used for storing and pouring liquids?

And now I'm imagining May singing the teapot song. May's freakout in the bathroom was interesting. Why can't she take off the jewelry? If I remember right, those are what's left of Raine's victims. I feel that has something to do with it.

The Tardis' is still a jerk I see. But a nicer one. She isn't insulting and trying to get rid of May like she did in Nine's era. I wonder what's changed? And what's changed about the Doctor? I know he's going Time Lord Victorious, but what else? Everything he said to her when she first arrived in this universe, did May and us readers really misinterpret them? Or at least, did I misinterpret them? I can't speak for other readers, but at least I know May was questioning that. Hmm, so many questions, so little time.

Cash is out. Peace!

seeing the docotr swear was a suprise i did not know i needed. A lot of the stories I've read before have him kind of like Willy Wonka, so seeing him say fwas funny. I feel like things are just spiraling downards for may... yikes!

I mean I don't mind crazy

No, seriously, the way you add little tips about The Doctor's madness makes me shiver! Very few people write about this part of him and I find you are doing it beautifully! May and Raine are incredible, along with your idea of Time Eaters. I can't wait for The Time Lord Victorious! I am sure that you will be one of the few (if not the only one!) who will be able to terrify me only with your representation of the almost Valeyard!

Aaahhhhhh! I always love it when you post! Kinda a silent reader, but I wanted to leave a review bc I'm so excited for where this story is going! I love the hints of the Time Lord Victorious, and I really want to see what happens with May in the next part (especially with the ending lol) & how she'll respond to the Waters of Mars (dun dun DUN). Anyways, love the story as always, hope you're doing well, and can't wait to see where it goes next! (also I'd love to see a short little fluffy adventure w/ the Doctor and May!)

Oooh brilliant chapter. Not full appreciated how much they need eachother to help with eachothers multiple personalities/personas. Doctor/timelord victorious/broken hearted wanderer, and, strong confident May/insecure and doubtful May/Raine. Beautifully written and you approach May's mental state really nicely. Hope you are staying well. Thank you for the update and allons-y for now.