I hope you continue this someday. I enjoyed the original, and had been enjoying the rewrite.

Damn I can deffinitly see improvements in how you write and caught a lot less typos and stuff of that nature, I think that your doing a great job setting up for future events and like how you have his shinigmai ability working, having him save Misa like that, I don't think I have seen that before. I'm excited to see where it goes even if I have to wait. Best wishes to you.

This was fantastic and superbly well-written! I’m sad that there isn’t any more! I noticed your other story of a similar name and will give that a go instead.

why are all the good stories abandoned...

I love this story so far. Nicely done and when you think about it, there are not many death note fanfic about time-travel. So it was nice to see this story. Really hope there's more. I had abandon my story so long that I had forgotten the plot already. I hope this story will continue.

I love his strawberry addiction! I hope it's more all-consuming than Kira anticipates and L eventually figures it out XD Please update soon!

I love this! Please update soon ne?!

Great chapter, can't wait to see how Misa's part in it plans out. Be awaiting the next update

This story is awesome. Even though Light's OOC, it's understandable and even cooler this way since I've always been more favorable towards Light. Until Near came in. Then I just didn't know who to side with because the little guy is so damn adorable.
Anyway, I still love the little changes you've made and I'm looking forward to the next update!

Thanks for the update! Keep up the good work!

Yay you updated! I'm still loving this story, your writing is so detailed. Sorry if you already know this, but if you want to put in an actual line to break your text you have to use copy and paste mode, click the button that looks like this (source code) and just go to the end of the paragraph you want the break between (after the /p tag) and type hr /. It'll insert a horizontal rule. Again sorry if you already knew this and just wanted to do the thing you're currently doing, i'm just letting you know just in case! Anyway, can't wait for the next chapter!

Okay, I did it. I skimmed over your previous work "Darkness Within Your Light" and I have to say, these two chapters are of a greater quality than those other thirty-something chapters put together. You have improved a lot, a few mistakes here and there, but it happens. It doesn't take away from your rewrite which has a more focused introduction that sets the stage quickly and efficiently without giving off the feeling that you’re trying to get to the ‘good stuff’ like the old version.

I especially like that you have Raito going back before the Death Note and Ryuk, rather than before when you just tossed him in the middle of being confined. You’re allowing more build up for Raito’s future plans which I enjoy, because beginning with Raito already in L's hands made your previous attempt seem rushed and unplanned, wanting to get the two protagonists paired together as quickly as possible instead of developing their feelings at a more realistic pace.

Even though I like L and Raito together in the stories I read, I think the idea of a pre-slash, psychological story is far better than a heavy, nonsensical romance for this rewrite. Besides, I doubt the two men, if actually in a relationship, would show their affections as freely as they did in your old story. If or when they get together in the rewrite, it would probably be with subtle and barely noticeable realizations and affections.

Lastly, I wanted to congratulate you for a Raito that is in-character, as much as he can be considering the circumstances. Your previous Raito was impulsive, too easily flustered, and didn't seem very bright for someone of his intelligence. You do him much justice this time around, and for that, I tip my metaphorical hat towards you.

Sorry for the long review, but I wanted you to be aware of how much you improved. I am glad you found the will to rewrite this.

I look forward to future chapters. Thank so much for your hard work!

I adore this fic already, I'm so excited to read more! It's such a cool idea that hasn't been done from what I can tell. Your writing is very detailed and flows well. There were a couple spots that were odd, like trapped in a body of a hormone body. (something like that, I have an awful memory) but other than that, for not being beta'd there's few mistakes I could pick up on. Keep it up, you're awesome.

can't wait for the update

This is really interesting