Disclose the person. I know you want tension but this is cheap.

Otherwise, you story is very original. I like it; good work!

Sorry, so far your story is quite good.

Just a little advise, it reads horribly if your character knows a voice and the author doesn’t isc

Smelly Gabe?...is that you?

Wait-but-quietus is-huh?

𝘕𝘰 𝘯𝘰 𝘯𝘰 𝘯𝘰 𝘯𝘰 𝘰 𝘯𝘰 𝘰 .𝘰 𝘯𝘰 𝘯𝘰

Sequel?

Only problem with this ending (In my opinion) was that we never saw him wrap up his relationship with Sally.

I know this story was finished a while back, but I just had to comment that the reference in the chapter was the 7 lightsaber forms from Star Wars and I love it so much

Oh come on! There is a pairing, yes, but like literally no scenes. but nice ending

wish there was a epilogue

I'm so glad Zoe didn't die this time around. she is my favorite character in all of pjo

GabrielSmelly Gabe

"He received no ... wings" - i think i love you just for that

this story seems interesting. unique idea. btw, pan is a son of hermes so he shouldnt be alive yet

This was a fantastic read well done

Pan is Hermès son, you taken quite a bit of liberties