This is a great story, barely M. One little thing... Alice's cheeks "fill with warmth" because she's blushing... but she's cold blooded.

This was great, I love the developing relationships in your stories.

Cheers~!

Ahhh! I love it!

Ah, I always enjoy more time with this pack of loons! So Alice is a naga, huh? I can see it.

Your strange love square works astonishingly well here.

I think you could get away with rating this T, as nothing risque actually happens on camera.

You damn glorious motherfucker, I spent the entirety of reading this thinking "Nah, no way this is going to have all of the contents it suggested, end in one chapter, and be satisfying." And you actually did it. You. Damn. Glorious. Motherfucker. Really, it's just a marvel how very efficiently written the story is. While I do have a problem in that it makes me confused as to what comes before this and how this places into the other series if it does, overall it had a very strong character interaction and nice comedy in it. All written effectively and efficiently, the latter which is often harder than the former. Anyways, I do hope to see more fun and interesting interactions and hijinks with the group, they've been your most fun and interesting group in my opinion, and I wonder how they could eventually reach A New World (probably won't be exactly the same, but enough to see how the end dynamics came to be with the children).

Anyway, great job there, I don't think I really have anything to add or criticize, so I'll just end my review here.

Sweet baby Byakuren! This is a little slice of heaven! Is this like an early Christmas gift or something? Oh my gods! So much love and warmth!

I'm at a bit of a loss though as what the hell to actually say? Love the creativity, the playtime, the banter, the sexual tension, the KOAKUMA, and the delightful humor. Hell I felt like a part of this relating to Koa perfectly! She gave voice to all my thoughts! Hmm I guess I'll just say Marisa shouldn't underestimate how fantastic her new natural lubricant could be, and Patchy and Alice have the perfect excuse to cuddle like mad now! Oh and Koa! Because Koa!