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A gay Pyrrha... well I’ve certainly never seen that one before. An interesting read, but ho-lee Fuck does this have some truly unsettling moments. On one hand, I’m curious as to where the story will go, on the other I don’t think I should continue reading.

And she was doing so well with the paragon route. *sigh* oh well.

There’s starting to be WAY to much Earth culture/language/societal/religious stuff being inserted. It really doesn’t fit well, feels very hamfisted and sloppy. The watchmen are also something that makes sense, yet paradoxically doesn’t make sense.

You’re a sick motherfucker.

Almost 2 years, mate. Where's the new chapter?

You cannot resist the Will of the Khan Maykr

Holy sweet mother of god... I was not mentally prepared for that. It was... very unsettling to read, probably because it was Ruby. I’m not sure if I want to continue reading, but at the same time I’m incredibly curious.

So, I caved in to my curiosity after reading this chapter, and there is something I feel I must confront you about. Lilith Totenrot, while a mighty fine name and one I like, is not really a valid name for a new identity. Why? Because neither "Lilith" or "Totenrot" are colors. Why does that matter, you may ask? Take a look at nearly every other named character: Penny, Jaune, Ruby, Weiss(Ger:White), Blake(OldEng:Black), Nora(Greek:light), Rose, Amber, Velvet, Emerald, Forest, Hazel, Cobalt, Mercury, Neon, Neopolitan. All these names are colors, and so it would definitely stand out if the already very conspicuous girl (she looks 12, she's actually 15, her eyes initiate fight/flight, she's glynda's niece, Yang says she looks like her sister, she's partners with Pyrrha) had a name that doesn't follow the cultural norm for names

Probably get this a lot and i'm kinda new when it comes to reading fanfics. But I wish you came back to this, it was a fantastic story. Definitely not the best, but your character interactions are adorable, hilarious, and well thought out overall. I haven't read many fanfictions but your's is the first one I've seen including such descriptive detail for psychological scenes. I could feel both Yang and Tai losing it.
Your style may be different, and while I can't speak for everyone I'd still read it atleast. Nobody will read anything if you don't put it out there. But only write it if you feel like it, There's no point in writing something if you don't enjoy it because in turn we won't. On that note, I suggest flat out ignoring the fandom and just do what you feel like. People will hate no matter what you do so just roll with it. Plus this is called fanfiction because it's your story right? It's for you to write what you want and us to get your story, not for someone to impose their views on another. We came here for your dark Ruby and in my opinion you've done a fine job. You're clearly not afraid to jump off the deep end and change the rules of chess. Watchmen? Blake as team leader? A massive Vale police airship? Just keep doing what you're doing if you come back.

I'm personally curious to see how this whole series of events would turn out as you've left us quite a few blanks... it eats at me when good stories are left unfinished. In this story Ruby's connected to Blake, thus Adam would come into play forever changing the events leading up to the end of volume 6 for multiple reasons. You've yet to unpack Yang and Ruby which has been a tension building since the early chapters. Tai, Qrow, "Summer", and Glynda I imagine are all characters who would fight for Ruby for completely different purposes only added to the fact all of them have some knowledge of Ozpin's little secrets. The silvered white wolf, ruby, has yet to be caught but it's attracted Ironwood's attention as probably the most dangerous grimm in all of remnant. I probably missed a few but I'd be droning on for awhile.
This fanfic also set up mental instability in many characters capable of mixing with the plot of RWBY for some seriously intriguing story. I won't go into specifics but Mountain Glenn and The Breach are ripe for several characters to get ripped apart psychologically and it can be bent in any way Ruby sees fit since she's pretty much running the show.

I'll be following this though I don't expect much to change. Hopefully i'll see more of this, till then I wish you the best of luck in your future writing projects.

Looking back on this, I think this might've been the saddest chapter of the fic, since it's the moment Ruby lost her last bit of hope. Turns pretty depressing after you understand the implications of her father's words and combine it with Ruby's comment on her attempted murder in the next chapter.

Ahahahaha, Roman able to match Goodwitch? That is the most funny thing i read in awhile.

That’s a very good point there with the insanity, for example Joker’s method to madness is that he just wants everyone to have that one bad day, or tipping point to madness. Another example would be Tom Riddle, he just thinks that only he has the right to lead, he only chose the purebloods because they were most likely to let him do horrible things to those “beneath” him. Deadpool just wants to have as much fun as possible, etc etc...

I’m enjoying the story so far and would like to know if you are continuing the story and are just on hiatus or you have decided to move on, and an excuse to keep sun alive is that the school balled out their student and put him in detention, or that his teammate with the lucky semblance got him out before the explosion because of a gut feeling, and you can probably use him as canon
fodder in the tournament for AJBL or for Blake to try try and reconnect with fanuse haven been around Weiss and scarlet.

I can understand what you were going for here with the broken-man aspect of Taiyang and what not. What I can't understand is why the hell Ozpin and Goodwitch took so long to react. These aren't fresh new hunters to let shock immobilize them, they are veterans. Yet they sat there and let him beat and rage at ruby, based on dialog and actions for a good 15 seconds. I get that for the story you needed him to flip out and what not but that is an unreasonable amount of time to get away with it.