I feel like these shorts are all going to end up as one big story...I bet I'm wrong but there's some hope that I'm right! Haha

Glad I decided to click on this story. It was great and now I am reading them all. Keep up the good work. They have great flow.

Aw aw aw

REALLY GOOD ALEX LOVED IT
-XOXO S

What happened? I still don't understand. She called things off just because their parents came home? What about the conversation they had? Even she admitted that it was REAL!

Daaaaaaang

Agh the pain

OhMyGod cliffhanger! Write more. Please! Don't leave me waiting

Agh, tmi mother.
The icecream part though haha.
Oh nooo

I finally see the reality of putting Susan where you did. She is from Abnegation and to have her serve as Lauren's 'conscience' in a way is fitting. And Tris making a guest appearance is putting the story together for me. Still finding the Peter and Lauren ship weird but it matches in a way because you did make Lauren older and Peter her irritating 'baby' step brother. Is he really dating someone? And how does Lauren's mother know?

Uh oh

This is like getting into some serious shit right here but I love it. Is it odd that I'm routing for Peter? I still am finding the whole Lauren and Peter ship a bit weird. But Peter's character being irritating really fits and a lot of people picture Lauren as Four's love interest. It was nice to see her in a different light and actually want to cheer for her too.

Dang

Yeah, how could you tell?

This made me laugh. I loved the chapter and can't wait for the next chapters!